11:11

it's only us. it's only now. a simple wish--it's only tonight.

“it’s 11:11,” you whisper, “make a wish.”
i thought i was the only one who did that.
but i guess i’m different,
i wish in the mornings too,
‘cause my room is full of jars of unwished wishes,
and cluttered with muse and memories,
and i don’t have any more space.
[i’ve fallen in this wishing well.
i have to dig myself out of this,
before i drown in flooding hope.
but my shovel’s imaginary.]

we hold hands for the first time,
just for comfort, nothing more,
but that doesn’t stop another wish,
forming at the back of my mind,
that i have to stick in my pocket
to save for a later time.
the timer on it ticks, ticks, ticks,
waiting for 11:11.
but i don’t release it
when the time comes, instead i wish.
[11:11: i wish i knew what to do.]

[‘cause what do wishes do?]

my to-do list is doodled
with hearts and hands,
and i can’t make out
if i’m supposed
to wash dishes,
or wish wishes.
i figure it’s the first,
but i’ll go with the second.
[sometimes i scare me,
but most of the time
i don’t.]

we kiss for the first time,
just for comfort, nothing more.
i know it wasn’t the right thing to do,
i could feel you stiffen, confused,
but that doesn’t stop another wish,
newly formed,
flutter at the back of my mind.
i sneak it into my pocket.
[i wish i wish i wish i wish i wish]

you’re the best thing
in my imaginary world.
[i wish i wish i wish]
real life doesn’t have anything like
the sun on your hair as you swing,
back and forth, back and forth.
[i wish i wish i wish]
or the way you smile when you see me,
[i wish i wish i wish]
or the way you jump off,
and stumble towards me,
[i wish i wish i wish]
nevermind the cold,
you brush off the awkward,
and hug me,
it’s friendly, but it’s not what i want,
[i wish i wish i wish]
and now i know,
i’ve fallen in love
accidentally on purpose.
i only wish you had too.
[11:11: i wish you loved like i do]

[but what do wishes do?]

Awards

Emperor of Emotion

Aug 5, 2010

• What is love?
• 11:11

 

Amazing

Aug 27, 2010

• Falling
• 11:11

 

WINNER of 2nd place

Sep 2, 2010

• Something that intrests you
• 11:11

Author's Note

this is most definitely based off of me.
i wrote this one a while ago, but it's close to my heart, so i figured i'd post.
thanks for reading.
<3

Reviews

[Alana]

Coincidentally, I made a wish at 11:11, which was only about a half hour ago. And then I stumbled upon this piece.
Honestly, I hear this as a song, acoustic and sweet, ending on the beauty and heartbreak of a minor chord.
I love the concept that there's jars of unwished wishes, the endless thoughts from each day, and yet you tuck them away. As if you need to save them, because you already know what you're going to wish for each night, and it's importance comes before all else.
Your words captured me and touched my soul about two seconds into reading them.
My heart also broke at the repetition of 'just for comfort, nothing more'. A nonchalant stab in the dark when it comes to unrequited feelings. You couldn't have worded it better.
I could probably pick out several more lines (all of them?), but I don't want to repeat what your heart's already written. I just feel the honesty, I love the concept, and I especially adore the square brackets ;D
This is beautiful.

[Alys Jackson]

Absolutley amazing. The marriage between love and wishes is perfect. I can sense that even though of happines, there is some sadness and lonliness woven into the words.

[BetweenYouAndMe]

“it’s 11:11,” you whisper, “make a wish.”
i thought i was the only one who did that.
but i guess i’m different,
i wish in the mornings too,

I love this part sooo much. amazing.

[Hannah Paige]

"we kiss for the first time,

just for comfort, nothing more."

100/100
(I don't give those a lot.)

[Liza]

we are all looking for one, to ignite one, to focus on one and connect to one..one by one...one is a very powerful number. delightfully ONe dER fULL :)

[Alysa]

This is absolutely beautiful.

[BrokenGirl]

Amazing write

[.......]

such a wonderful write

[Just Me]

This was so amazing. The emotions in it were so real. It was like I was experiencing it for my self.

[miSS LEaf]

*you have a distinct, pure, outstanding style, i am charmed ~ well expressed*

[Amortentia03]

"You're the best thing in my imaginary world" and this is one of the best things in my real world. This whole poem really struck a chord with me because I have all to often tucked away those wishes for a friend who only seeks the comfort of what we have. A beautiful concept beautifully worded.