i’m a sniper on a rooftop taking potshots at a broken heart. you’re a spy, undercover with nothing to lose from the start. i stand there, undiscovered and watch the girl with the crooked smile, a goddess incognito, she’s the one.
the setting is a club. we dance around each other, covertly, calculating. catlike and circling. learning each other, discerning each other. in your handshake i feel your heart beat one two.
your dress, white, almost sheer, fluttered around you as you spun. you looked so innocent. i could feel you breathe, heave, scared, exhilarated. we move like a waltz, but far faster. one two three.
i knew who and what you were. my enemy, my lover. we hit the floor, i’ll have you another time. i captured your heart, you stole my life. you’re a thief and an angel. the days and days desert us, one two three four.
you lay with me, a white lily in your hair. you say, ‘stay with me.’ ‘forever’ i lie. time is soft and sweet, on our last day. the hours flash by: one two three four five.
i say ‘meet me at six.’ we exchange kisses and goodbyes. as you leave, i see you for the last time. and time, time, time goes by, i still wait for you. my mind and time conflict, but i know you are gone, as the lonely clock chimes one two three four five six.
‘she was terminated.’ over without a fight. well, i’m back on the streets tonight, i light the fuse. i hope they know the demon they created, has nothing to lose, and taste for violence and vengeance. it’s funny how life can change in one two three four five six seven days.
the setting is a club.
we dance around each other,
covertly, calculating.
catlike and circling.
learning each other,
discerning each other.
in your handshake
i feel your heart beat
one
two.
Captivating write! I love these lines, "we dance around each other, covertly, calculating. catlike and circling." You are definitely one to watch and to think you say you only just started writing poetry. Welcome to the Writer's Cafe.
you entered this write in my contest... about a year ago... Anyway I just thought i would stop by and tell you that i really love this.... the imagery is so tangible.
Such a story, in just the few stanzas of poem. It feels so beautiful, so thrilling and cunning. I can't explain the emotion this poem gives me. It's captivating and sincerely gorgeous. Sometimes, non-capitalization really doesn't work for a poem (especially for me, I find it distracting) but this one really pulls it off by immersing you in it's story so deep you can't even notice. You're already to far away.
Completely breathtaking. Thank you for supplying such a wonderful read. :)
I adore this.
The counting of stanzas is relevant, and adds a separate tone to the piece that is really necessary to pull it all together. I love your style of writing in all of your pieces, and this was no disappointment. Excellent sense of movement and rhythm throughout the entire piece, and your language itself was gorgeous. Great alliteration and inner rhymes.
Wonderfully penned.
wonderful work, i loved this. your words are so, so beautiful, and so vivid. i like how you wrote "my enemy, my lover". from what i've read sometimes its not those we like we fall in love with, but the ones we swore we would never love. brilliant man
Hello, my name is William and I'm a write-aholic.
My first poem ever was written in January 2009, so I'm still pretty rough. Nothing is perfect, but I'm addicted to writing, and I do enjoy doing it.. more..