Your share of pain...

Another of my random thoughts collection...

 

 

You were a sweet lullaby for me,

The world through your eyes did I see,

My sun shone through your smile,

Just tell me my crime...

Why did you decide to cheat on me,

Was our relation for you just an enjoyable ski,

Were all the promises involved a mere coy,

I want all my answers from you boy...

I even trusted you with my life,

To keep you happy how hard I strived,

But it seems all that doesnt matter anymore,

We parted our ways a little while before...

 

 

To clear all misconeptions running in yor head,

Let me make it clear that I dont intend to just cry on my bed,

Instead my mind is walking a diffrent road,

To take my revege all the ideas are getting on board...

You are not going to get away with this so soon,

To bend before your pleading I am not that big a loon,

I have learnt my lesson never to forget,

You are the one who should now dread...

My plan to bring you down is nothing close to pleasant,

Do you remeber dear You told me I was beautiful as the cresent,

Why should I be the only one burning at a flame,

Trust me Baby you will soon enjoy your share of pain...

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Priya Seht]

hey simple....
kya baat?? such a topic??
is everything OK??
it's a good one..but not for me you see... so ignore my comment!

[deeps]

This is such a powerful write here. I enjoyed the flow you have given this. Such emotion put into your brillant words!

[QuothCorvid]

"Heaven has no rage like love to hatred turned / Nor hell a fury like a woman scorned." ~William Congreve I think this quote best sums up this particular topic. I know it is a favorite of mine, and how true even now after its original outpouring of quill to parchment in the 1690's

[Senseless whatever]

very nice. Emotional pain turns to anger. the unfortunate feelings of redemption needed to ease our own suffering. Your anger comes through with power. Good job.

[An owl on the moon]

There is such a powerful display here of pain turned to anger and how it can take over the mind and heart. When cut, we often strive to cut back, and in so doing we are completely absorbed in the revenge. Your words are gripping in every way.

[Nathaniel Taylor]

Ah, the seemingly inevitable pain and feelings of vengeance which follow in the wake of a destructive love. I can relate to this piece particularly well due to the choice of words and the sentiment found behind them. I applaud you sincerely and effortlessly as I re-bury the feelings you had set free as I read this.
Excellent Write !!

[harman kour]

Excellent write dear! Enjoyed it truly... I like the firmness in the girl here... nice read in all!

[Coyote Poetry]

A very good poem. Being pissed off and angry is spoken very strongly in your words. I like the poem myself as is. To the point and without pity. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Shalini Dinesh]

nice poem, and anger exposed in words, well it has got a good flow too, yet i would like to share a small piece of advice or tip whatever it maybe called, which i once received from one of a wonderful writer, it is
"its not always necessary that you need to rhyme your poem, maybe just let the words free and maybe a few rhyming words will make it even great at times",

i love rhyming poems and since most of your poems that i have read so far had rhyming so thought to share this tip with you...

earlier all or most of my poems will be rhymed in every line, after taking this advice i think i have improved my writing, maybe you too can try, there is always room for more and more betterment, and am still working on it....

i enjoyed reading this poem, wonderful flow!
thanks for sharing

[Dev]

Interesting read !! I hope not autobiographical though coz reading this seems that you're all out hating this person :) :) Well written .. in between it flows like a song..
I sorta agree w/ poet's world.. on the pure basis that I think mine did too.. Not that I dont write stuff now too that rhymes but the pieces that dont are more successful.. thats what I think atleast