The whole time I was reading this I kept thinking " To see the world through the eyes of a child is magical. Everything is fresh, new, alive and exciting. It also reminds me of a Bible verse. "You must become as a little child."
Your poem is magical,I keep thinking that "that one particle that is only you" is innocence When we perceive the world through innocence, then there is no motive, no reasoning, it just is. (pure and simple magic) I don't know if I'm making sense, What I'm trying to say is so hard to put into words or it may simply be that I just don't know the right words or form to say what I want to say
I know my review is turning into a book but you have touched a part of me ( through your poem )that has been yearning to be free for so long. Something I have been trying to say but have been unable to put into words, yet you have captured that elusive thought so well.
Your poem has touched me and reached the parts of my thoughts and being that I thought were untouchable.
And you have presented it so beautifully. What more can I say than ,this is as near perfection as we as imperfect humans can attain.
oh wow i really like this! it is true, i don't know why we try so hard to seek wisdom when it just creates an imbalance of happiness, when it would be so easy to embrace the magic surrounding
thank you for this! it is lovely
what a beautiful piece and i love the creative picture and manner in which you laid it out. the basic principal of this piece is so powerful "don't try and understand this life" could have written gibberish in between writing that phrase and that is what the message really is about. For me that is really loud and clear and just so important that the question should remind us of what really matters to us.
peace,
danielle
thats one of the few pieces i ever read here ,which really felt so strong ,yet it tells me how futile we are ,all the time we think we have got it all ,we think we got wizened up ,but the more we think we are near truth about it all ,we know we are far away from it ,and we better stayed where we are ,then maybe we would have been closer ,really really great write,what you wrote is the something that haunts me all the time ,
What can I say, this is simply one of the best poem I've read on the cafe. The word choice, the metaphors, the powerful inflection in the voice... and then there's the overall message, which is priceless.
Favorite part: "...Knowledge, / which rarely offers more than factured wisdom / and crumpled bits of maps / with undiscovered lands..."
Very wise and I agree. It all makes perfect sense.......aggggh! There I go again, reading with my head and trying to understand what I read instead of just feeling it! Is it a male condition, the need to know everything? 'never murder magic...fractured wisdom...and crumpled maps' are the lines I like best.
I'm not really sure what to say to this except for - Wow. This is truly amazing and loved every line of this. This is an inspiring piece of work, work of a true poet. I enjoyed this very much.
ACHTUNG! Fair warning!!!!!!
Sorry, folks ....
I tried. I really did ....to start spending time here, to start writing and reading here again ... But I simply couldnt bring back the old spirit o.. more..