Look Closely

Look closely,

Can you see the tracks of my tears?

Can you see the sad lonlely trail

They leave as they make thier salty way

Along the trial of my life?

 

Look closely,

Can you see the scars

From the many wars I've waged

Over countless ages

And upon countless battlefields?

 

Look closely

Can you see the broken pieces

Of my shattered dreams

That have been destroyed

By the storms of life?

 

Look closely,

Can you see me crying now?

Can you see my salty tears

Shed for you

As you walk out of my life for good?

 

Look closely,

Can you see?

Reviews

[FuMiko]

Really emotional, and well written. Though, I'm afraid it dragged a little bit in some places.
Overall, though, I really liked it.