Fae

for a contest :D quick write, not the greatest but not the worst, yay for average lol

The whispered wind of Fae doth blow
Amongst thine leaves with golden glow
T'is words adrift on yonder breeze
That follow amongst thine earthly ease

Yet pixie dust and faery wing
Art seen of yet and yet unseen
Waters ripple, kelpie's sing
T'is where the Fae have long since been

The Seely court t'is faire and true
A golden light amongst us who
Wouldst shade our eyes from Fae divine
The Seely wouldst control what's thine

Unseely Fae know treachery
Whom prank an unsuspecting thee
Benevolence? T'is not their game
Nae, dark and shadowed, they mar and maim

Together lost to time untold
The fae are gone to wilt, so old
As Magic leaves the world grown bare
We lost the Fae, both dark and faire

Reviews

[Miss Marie Riorden.]

In all honesty, yours looks so much better than mine. I see recognizable terms like "The Seely Court." You follow the Old English rule quite well, and it seems to all rhyme well.
Only suggestion to change I would think you should make is in the 3rd stanza, last line. Just change "what's" to "what is." :)
This does a better job of describing The Faë than I could.

Great write, and good luck in the contest!
-Marie Riorden-

[asdarkeyesclose]

sad that we lost them. I liked this whimsical poem with its old world charm and simple melody. I liked that you spelt fairy as faery that's how I like to spell it as well. great choice of image and a poem I really did enjoy. fantastic.