Ideas, dreams, unfathomable things!

for a contest and for fun, italics are one voice, bold another, both of one mind

Ideas, dreams, unfathomable things!

They twist, they churn, they freeze and burn!

How do such strange things come to life?

Where are these things that bark, that bite?

 

Or better yet, I wish to know

When these things die, where do they go?

Do they, like dogs, go straight to heaven?

Or like sins abound, in hell they're found?

 

Ah better yet, I think I know

These things, ideas you say they're called

They disappear into a fog

 

A fog, you say? Why how absurd

They do not die, they're just unheard

 

Unheard? You say they cannot speak?

So they are mute, or are we deaf?

 

Deaf you think, are you a fool?

If we are deaf, how do we hear?

 

I see your point, my voluptuous friend

But if they do not die, how do they end?

 

They do not end, they live forever

Not life, not death, but inbetween

 

Remember friend, 'tis you who asked

Where do they go when they have died

If heaven or hell they can be found

 

You call me to lie on such a thing?

Preposterous! I never mused such simple ideas

Why would I wonder the absurd as you

You who would argue a mute point till it's deaf

 

But absurdity is as it does

You mused the idea of ideas death

And in the end a circle bounds

For in it's death, another's found

Reviews

[Introspective Mind]

Excellent piece of contribution....rich in exploration...softly tuned...akin to a fresh dawn...just awake...gently rubbing sleepy eyes of night...to experience an awe-inspiring strings of creations painted in just a few strokes of simplicity...Loved self-questing format.
Regards,

[Hamkar]

I like this so much. It really makes you think.

[ShaneBerry]

i agree with kira, it seems like an argument between wishful thinking and realism, very original and the rhyme scheme was brilliant!

[Kira]

It sounds like an argument, the two contrasting thoughts. My favorite lines:

"Or better yet, I wish to know
When these things die, where do they go?"

[Emily Quinn]

I absolutely love how you wrote is with the perspectives of two contrasting thoughts, I really enjoyed how you began each stanza of an opposing debate with transitions from the previous.
(i.e Or better yet, I wish to know
Ah better yet, I think I know

They disappear into a fog
A fog, you say? Why how absurd)

[Fuzzy_Poluzah]

Very hauntig, actually. Good peom yu've got here! Nice work kid!

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

This is a great entry to the contest. Congrats on your first place win.