Flame or Shadow

I have no idea where this came from...

In distant realms ablaze with strife,

the shadows vanish, cease.

The flames of hate consume the world

and put an end to peace.

 

The breath of fire unmakes the land

'til naught but flames hold sway.

And always there, in blinding strength,

the endless light of day.

 

Across the sea of endless stars

a fading world cries out.

It falls from light to deepest black,

as darkness grasps the shout.

 

A lightless void of bitter cold,

a prison, dark as night.

It puts an end to dreams of warmth

and tales of winged flight.

 

And now I make an inquiry:

Which of these is the worse?

The daylight's burst of brightest flame

or deepest shadow's curse?

Author's Note

As always, feel free to critique.

Reviews

[Meh]

Love the last stanza. Makes me wonder about hell too. Which one would be better of the two? I think flames. I'd rather be burned alive than in total darkness. I hate being in the dark.

Anyway, the setting of the poem is vividly descriptive about the two Hells and the consequences that come with each one. Keep up the wonderful work. It's not everyday I find such a gifted writer at the cafe. :)

[Paul Wallace]

Wow. The whole way the poem is shaped just feels ancient but in a way comforting. I love the last stanza how it all simply falls into place. I have always loved those types of poems.

Keep writing!

[Phoenix Alleena]

Wow. I love the medieval effect of the poem in general.
This is just excellent. I don't even know what to say,
but it's going to be added as one of my favourites (:
KEEP WRITING!

[Taylor H]

you certainly did a great job for not knowing where it came from. but then again nobodt knew were a star came from for all time. this was a great poem