Dawn

This is a little piece born of the eternal boredom of Lit. :)

The shadows twist, the mountains roar

and nature comes undone.

The worlds collide in smoke and mist

with fire from the sun.

 

The doorways open, spilling light

from halls of starlight realms.

And gates of Hell unleash their flames

as demons don their helms.

 

All windows fling their shudders wide

in whirls of light and sound.

The heavens' swords and spears of gold

rain down upon the ground.

 

The silver horns announce the fight

as armies meet on Earth.

The forces of the night and day

prevent the Dawn's rebirth.

 

The battle rages on and on

upon horizon's streak

until the chasm opens wide,

dividing armies weak.

 

Eternally the war goes on

at sunrise and sunset.

'Til Time's undoing, wreathed in flame

comes in to pay our debt.

Author's Note

As always, feel free to critique.

Reviews

[Ebb and Flow]

This is so beautiful! Ahh! I love how you personified night and say into armies. This has to be one of my favorite poems!

[Ghost of Jupiter]

I found this piece to be a beautiful escape and wonderfully scribed... I really enjoyed the story within the poem. Will be back to read more of your work. :)

[gemma]

uhhh im not going to critique ur spelling errors but im just going to say its good....it wud be cooler if it was longer tho i kno u cud do it justin keep up the good work bra! hehe i said bra

[Jessica M.]

"The worlds collide in smoke and mist"
nice line,
i like the flow of the poem
there's a spelling error in the second stanza *unleash.
nice write :D