Melting Sun

Sunset at the beach...

The gold sun falls to watery horizon,

fading into copper, bronze.

 

Slips of cloud, like shredded silk,

become translucent ribbons

that capture the incandescence

and turn to fiery magnificence.

They burn away, indigo, magenta,

tinged with gold.

 

Fire meets Water

as the mighty sun sets.

Its copper brilliance

melts into the distant waves,

glowing orange ripples.

 

As the blazing display finally dies,

the silvery curtain of dusk falls,

quickly replaced by the black abyss

coated in pinpricks of diamond.

No trace is left of the dripping dazzle,

in the silence embrace of night's call.

Author's Note

As always, feel free to critique.

Reviews

[Wildfleour]

This feels familiar, but you didn't say it was a repost so I guess it's new. Justin - your images are so lovely and fluid.........

My favorite part:

Slips of cloud, like shredded silk,

become translucent ribbons

that capture the incandescence

and turn to fiery magnificence.

They burn away, indigo, magenta,

tinged with gold.

[thoryash]

dude ... brilliant imagery and vivid description ... "the black abyss/coated in pinpricks of diamond" ... long time since i read anything like this .... kudos ...

[Michael X]

Fluid and inspired justin, your talent shines in this writing, the imagery
and flow, quite stunning, the details laced with magic, reading,
there is much to consider, but the full effect is truly watching the sun set,
this was a pleasure to read. indeed.

[Phoenix Alleena]

Perfect! This has great imagery, indeed.

the lines that end with Incandescence and Magnificence
certainly add to the poem's awesomeness.

Great job :D

[skylor]

love the name, and the poem is amazing.