Escape Reality

I've been pondering this one for a while...

If you could escape the world

for a few perfect hours,

leave behind responsibilities

and the deep stress and drama

to a world entirely your own...

 

Where would you go?

 

Would it be a beautiful beach?

Crystalline waters of blue, grey, and green

softly lapping against your bare feet.

The blazing sunset of amber and rose

bursting and fading across the waters...

 

Would you create a twilight land of Faerie?

The eternal, soft glow of silver dusk

streaming through tall hallways of trees.

Small lights of all the hues

flickering and swirling in the shadows,

accompanied by the giggles of elves...

 

Would a copper and emerald grove call you?

Black sky and silver stars shining down,

calling your name through the whisper

of the wind through the trees.

Magic in the very air,

echoing through the pealing notes

of soft chimes in the distance...

 

Would your place be a desert?

A golden white dune of soft sand

framed by the pure blue of the heavens.

The infinitesimal grains drifting through your fingers

like gold mists of fellowship

while the warm breezes

rush across you...

Author's Note

As always, feel free to critique.

Reviews

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To escape the realities of real life, I ponder this daily. Your structure is beautiful and descriptive. You gave this a personal effect by asking the reader, "Where would you go?" I like the fact that you presented choices for the reader as well. Hence, this is my destination...

"Would a copper and emerald grove call you?

Black sky and silver stars shining down,

calling your name through the whisper

of the wind through the trees.

Magic in the very air,

echoing through the pealing notes

of soft chimes in the distance..."

Nicely done.

[Jenna]

Wow that was beautiful and real flowy. I think if I had to choose one of those destinations it would beWould it be a beautiful beach?

Crystalline waters of blue, grey, and green

softly lapping against your bare feet.

The blazing sunset of amber and rose

bursting and fading across the waters...

[C.L. Wilson]

I'd go to the land of Faerie

Great imagery. I also found this poem to be very open for readers to continue with... make there own place. I love it.

[Wildfleour]

A wonderful poem. I'm not sure where I'd go.............smile.

Again - look to cut out extraneous words - and, to, of, etc.