Ocean Dance

I went to the beach today, and found inspiration in the waves...

Another wave roars down

the watery path.

Galloping white stallions

of bubbling, wild mist

prancing their way

to the sandy shores.

 

As they hit the beach,

they steadily dissolve away

until they float back to regain

their strength, speed, and form.

 

I brace myself against

another of their watery stampedes.

It rushes through and around me

in a rage of air, water, and raw power.

Pushing my way through the waist-high liquid,

I move in a wobbly path deeper into the sea.

 

I can barely touch the bottom now,

and rolling pulses of water raise me up on high.

The combination of gentle pulses, roaring stallions,

and arching lattices of blue, green, and white

gives me the grace and peace of mind

of a dancer, an acrobat, and a martial arts master

melted down to their pure essences

and mixed into the glorious currents of the waves.

 

I push off the ground in an effortless leap,

hover above the sea floor in a breathless moment,

and am carried back downward by the swift surge.

 

Throughout the day, I unravel the mysteries of the water:

How to float peacefully under roaring waves,

How to ride the seemingly wild white horses,

How to control my path through the waters,

And so much more.

Instinct takes over, and an effortless, beautiful dance

that cannot be described in words,

only in graceful leaps and bounds.

Author's Note

As always, feel free to critique.

Reviews

[CJ]

Justin,
As always, your poems are amazing....filled with great descriptions. I loved it!!! In this poem I truely love how you put together the idea of the ocean as stallions, and crashing waves as stampedes; then showing the mysticness (is that a word?) of it by calling it a beautiful dance. Wonderful write Justin!!!!
.::Casey::.

[Matalia Riordan]

I love the sea having grown up with it right out my window my whole life. It's majestic, powerful and sometimes ruthful and it has a power all of it's own. My element is naturally air but water calls to me as well. I loved the imagery in this, it made me want to go for a swim.


Matalia

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

A wonderful embodiment of the ocean and its mysteries. I love your descriptions of becoming one with it. Very nicely penned. Thank you.
Light,
Siddartha

[Dani California]

I love this. You've captured it.. you truly have.
The experience...

the peace, the sensation, the appreciation of nature...
the ocean (my fav place).

this is wonderful Justin.. :)

And it appears your block washed away with the waves! Awesome!
Just like this piece is!

[Wildfleour]

Ah, Justin, you did it, my friend. What a wonderful poem.

I absolutely adore this line: How to ride the seemingly wild white horses,

Just terrific. Your writing skills, for such a young man, are truly impressive!

[Abigail Alliah]

I love it. Not too much I could critique. I admire the grace and power which it illustrates and the writing which does so. It is slightly repetitive but creative still each time the horse-water analogy is repeated. Very well written and i hope expressed.