Lightning

I think that lightning looks like giant cracks in a pane of glass, so I wrote about it!

A bolt of lightning,

pure, untainted energy,

splits the sky in half

like an ominous crack

in the universal window.

 

Jagged, blazing tendrils

split hazardously outwards

from the main, twisted body.

It illuminates the cathedral

of grey and black clouds;

A bulging, shifting ceiling

of engulfing shadows.

 

An echoing, smoky BOOM!

transmits for miles around.

The roar of the mighty beast

growls through endless worlds.

Or is it a heavenly trumpet

signaling the approach

of a celestial master? Is it

the powerful call

of a warrior of the light?

 

Perhaps it is he who strikes

a mighty, fiery hammer

against the orb of shadows.

Is the frightening blast

really a call of hope?

Or the blazing, wicked bolts

really the fiery cracks

inflicted by his gleaming sword?

 

The warrior strikes

over and over and over,

bombarding the inky shield

To free the captured lives.

The sun is his mace,

The moon his shield,

and the stars, ah, the stars.

They are his invincible arrows,

which pierce through the hold

and bring the sky back

to a world in half-shadows.

Author's Note

As always, feel free to critique.

Reviews

The poem gets better and better as it goes. The pace catches up, and so does the words, it is like it is maturing as it proceeds further.

You have well depicted the imagery you are tying to convey, with the vastness of the clouds, and the grandeur of the whole lightning concept.

Good form, good flow, good choice of words, well painted imagery, well imparted message.

A very good piece

[Ebb and Flow]

Amazing. Thunderstorms are so amazing and so this piece is just wonderful. Absolutely love it.

[Kayla]

This is an Amazing poem!!! I LOVE THIS PLACE

[Wildfleour]

Hi - Hope you posted this to my group (smile and hint hint). There is nothing I like better than a good thunderstorm, if I'm in a safe viewing spot!

I loved the last stanza the most! Just terrific!

[Dani California]

Oh I like!! I love lightning.. I think it's facsinating. Fantastic imagery!!

I really enjoyed this Justin... :)

Excellent work!

[Mistral Bilgera]

beautiful imagery! the power is delivered by your good choice of words. :)