Sun, Moon, and Flame

This poem shows three of the many forms light can take. I was hoping to create some interesting imagery by using metallic and gem tones to describe the object.

Sunlight glows,

Filling the sky with golden, warm light.

Leaves of emerald, ruby, and amber

Fall, spinning and dancing on the wind.

 

Moonlight shines,

Coating the world in a silver-blue veil.

Stars of diamond, sapphire, and pearl

Shimmer, sparkling and flashing through the night.

 

Firelight leaps,

Snapping the air with hot, bright flames.

Sparks of gold, copper, and bronze

Fly, wandering and floating in the deep sky.

 

Reviews

[poddar kushal]

it is very overwhelming..you have the eye and the words and they conjure to form a color so intense only mind can see it.

[Joan Thomas]

what a beautiful descriptive picture you paint.. I want to be where you see..

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Just beautiful - this reminds me of a poem I wrote called 'Elements of the Celtic Tradition' in that it is an ode to the wonders of nature and the Elements as a whole...stunning imagery - painted like the best of landscapes. Thank you.
Light,
Siddartha

[Lyra H]

Wonderfully done! You have a real gift, use it well...

[CJ]

this created a real picture in my mind Justin.....i LOVED IT!!!! hahaha....dont worry though, im not just being nice...this is AH-MAZ-ING!!!! :)

You have good form and choice of words.

This poem shows good example of choosing appropriate items and their color attribute in pertaining to another color.

This is a good piece.

[Wildfleour]

Hi - This appeals to my love of nature. I hope you consider joining my group "The Sun and the Moon and the Stars" and posting this piece.

Also - I have a contest on my group page that you should check out! :)

[Sarah]

The imagery in this poem is FANTASTIC. This is some of the best description that I have read in a while, so great job! And you picked such beautiful objects to write about~ Lovely!!