The Boy

This is a poem I wrote awhile ago that I am pretty content with, it's sad at first but it ends up with a nice ending :)

The Boy

Monday:

The boy runs home from school, 

doesn't want to be late

He sported a black eye today

 i wonder, what's his fate?

Tuesday:

The boy walks slowly from school,

hoping he shall miss

the monster waiting for him at home,

he tells no one of this.

Wednesday:

The boy walks home from school,

long sleeved shirts cover the mess

If i asked to see the bruises

I wonder if he'd say yes.

Thursday:

The boy is crying as he walks from school,

nobody believed his story, to his dismay

They say keep telling until someone does,

"I'd believe you" I want to say.

Friday:

The boy walks home with me from school,

I promised I'd never tell

The boy is rattled and nervous,

as he steps through the doors of his hell.

Saturday:

The boy tells me he's done,

and that nobody will care

I tell him that i need him,

and all he does is stare. 

Sunday: 

The boy calls me and tells me " I love you "

then the line goes dead

He hangs up just before I can say 

what's going through my head

Monday:

I walk from school alone, 

but at the hospital i caved

Room 235 is occupied 

with the boy whom I have saved.

Author's Note

please ignore the capital and lowercase "i" issue lol (^.^)

Reviews

[thoughtsofforgotten]

When I started reading this, I honestly didn't expect much. But as the poem progressed it just became better and better. The story takes a turn when you suddenly mention the narrator in the story, and a descriptions becomes more of a story. I really liked it, but maybe you should look at verse 4. I don't know, the amount of words per. line just don't seem right. I know i will be reading more of yours!

[Silver~]

Thank you so much for the review! I'm glad you liked it and I completely understand what you mean when you mention verse 4, I'll make sure to go back and change something so it works better and stays 4 lines, thank you so much (^.^)

[Jazzy]

I love this poem it is so touching, all i can say is W..O..W! All of it just fits together like a puzzle being constructed.

[Silver~]

Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it :)