Fire inside

This is how love feels for me sometimes

How do I feel?
I wish I could decide.
It seems really hard
To know what's inside

I wish I could tell 
But right now I'm not so sure
If I should say a word
Because I know I did before.

When I'm with you
I speak my mind
But that other secret
I cannot seem to find

What is to come
I do not know
But with you and I
Time will show

The thoughts that I have
The emotions I feel
I pretend they are fake
But I know they are real

You say no
But my heart still yearns
I try to hold it in
But on and on the flame still burns

In my heart
There burns a fire
Filled with lust
Love and deep desire

I know what they say
Time will tell
To makes me wonder
It makes me dwell

Please say yes
My heart will soar
I won't crumble
Or hit the floor

In your hands
I place my heart
Cherish it for ever
And not rip it apart

Reviews

[Jeremy Baker]

I like the exploration of questioning and uncertainty as your central theme. The structure and rhyme pattern are well maintained and add an extra element to reading the work. For a high school student who claims not 'to be good at poetry' you've done a very good job. =)

[Brad Nugent]

This has such a beautiful sentiment behind it. Better than many poems I have read. I really like it! My advice for further developing would be to read it out loud and find anything that doesn't flow as well as the rest. You may want to change some line lengths, for example. Take my advice with a grain of salt though - I have never been very good at editing my own work! This is good stuff - so don't be so harsh on yourself! And keep writing!