How Beautiful

how boring you are my dear

with your cold blank eyes

and your pale frozen skin

let me take you apart

look at you from the inside

surely things are better in there

let me examine your brain

and see what you thought of me

let me hold your heart

so i can know what it felt like to have it

i can not help but laugh

as the red drips down my nose

who knew you could feel so warm

i wish you could see yourself right now

beautifully vulnerable

completely harmless

i almost wish you would wake up

but i rip out your eyes instead.

Reviews

[Angel Veselinov]

Good nocturne work :) thanks for sharing

[Moonflower]

Intricately dark and disturbing, very nice.

[A.A.Romanczuk]

what a dark, almost gothic piece... but I like the idea of dissection...You execute this perfectly!
how boring you are my dear

with your cold blank eyes

and your pale frozen skin

let me take you apart

look at you from the inside

surely things are better in there
- I enjoy the contrast between the boring, every day mask....and the hidden secrets within...generally the angelic are not so saintly and the demons..simply misunderstood

Beautifully horrible! Thats what I've got to say. Is that a compliment? Yes! Vivid in imagery. Yet there isn't too much description. Very good work! :)

[Blossom]

Love the poem and the meaning. so dark and beautiful.the flow of this is amazing

[Amber Betty Marie Child..]

a very light speaking and hard love ripping in circles as blasting

[silentsmiles]

:o dakota I am sorry for my grammar english is my third and I always forget that english capitalizes the I's i do apologize :c

[Ian Faraway]

Ok grammar is killing me in this poem. I stopped halfway. I loved the poem and it's meaning but there's no capitalization of 'I' and no periods except at the very END. It's almost like one huge sentence and it bugged the hell out of me. Other than that I loved the poem's meaning.

[Coyote Poetry]

A gentle beginning with a the desire to take apart and examine. A very strong ending.
"i almost wish you would wake up
but i rip out your eyes instead. "
I like this poem. No weaknesses. Just straight to the point. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[EMP]

wow, this was amazing. i loved it. it's weirdly brilliant!