Blinded by the Sun

So I'm not sure if this completely finalized.. Help me out?

When I was little

                and even now

I’ve always been told

                “Don’t look directly into the sun”

“You’ll go blind,” they always say

 

And in retrospect

                I wish I’d listened

Because their words, unfortunately

                have held themselves true

For I each time I look at my sun

                my vision gets a little

more

fuzzy

 

But sometimes it’s just too hard to resist

Sometimes I just have to

                sneak a little peak

Even if it’s just for a short little while

Sometimes I’m not even aware of it

                but I’ll catch myself staring

                at his beauty burning bright

 

Soon I can’t see anything else

                in my efforts to block him out

 

Everyone else can see the hell

I’m putting myself through

Including me

But it’s helpless

 

I’m helpless

Author's Note

So like I said, this might not be completely finalized so yeah, anything you have to say would mean a lot. Thanks so much :)

Reviews

[Patrick]

The message within the message brings itself out nicely. Here and there glimpses of deep thought shine out, ' his beauty burning bright'.
Hope others will read and appreciate this.