All of your planets combined

 

 

 

 

Like a dazzling breeze from wind

you surprise me superb

 

from desolate afar

Without me 

you're but mars

Without you

is having

no stars 

no rain

Your existence is much to great 

to be placed upon on this idol earth

You are the sun dipping in cool night

for the very first time 

 

Venus watches you in amazement

underneath the galaxies eclipse

while Jupiter,

 

dust's the milky way off his back

My eyes become under attacked

by your radiant and endless glance of glare

as if you stepped out from the heavens priceless floors

Then I watch as your knees bow down 

and open up the altar doors

Welcoming the spirit that has bought for our lives

the gift of love to rebuke and tame the devious lies by light

 

Though I know my perfection is but never

all I know is that my love for you

is but a solid truth

My majesty

My gorgeous queen

The only woman who has walked

across the deep blue sea

By your beauty

and your charm

like fine gold rested inside of Pluto's arms

And while Saturn's rings blow kisses to Uranus

on comets breathless shores

Let night have pleasant hymns

above his honey moon his bride

The one he holds then plants confide

beneath the smile in Mercury's eyes

like orbits mist of love divine  

 

I thank the high skies

so grateful you are mine

 

With all of  your planets combined

awaiting our first Xena and Eris to

be birthed in sublime

Let us rule planets time

while our bodies lift gravity 

with our instrumental climb

Inheriting our beloved constellation's shine

never letting Neptune's evaluation of destination blind

Let our love dwell but forever more

inside eternity's enchanted galore

With you and only you

Mi querida mi amor

                                                              

                                                  Orlando Murcia 

Reviews

[Moonflower]

This is elegant and tenderly written. Beautiful work.

[Jillian Alexis]

this is sooooo beautifully written. i enjoyed reading it very much!!

[Devon]

Oh my God!!!!!!!

I'm

I'm yea, Oh my God

Damn you!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! This was perfect

That's all I have to say

Love you love you love you

Uhhhh

Damn it I love you

=)

[Clockwork]

I really liked the depth of this piece. You take a bold stand that defines modern standards, even challenging some ancient elements in your references to the planets. In that respect this piece has an Annabell Lee aspect to it. I also felt some of the romantic dreaminess of Byron here, but with a new age passion and flair. I liked your use of the couplets in the middle of this piece. I am glad that Marie sent me a read request for this piece, I really enjoyed it.

[Marie Anzalone]

It is the brave soul who, in a culture marked by increasing cynicism, dares to take on a love poem of this depth, breadth, and caliber. To claim to love as the Gods of old is heresy, yet here you are, doing just that. My hat off to you. You leave me breathless with your words. I ahve recommended this to my friend Clockwork; if you have not read his work, you should. Very well done, Orlando... I loved this!

[Jacqueline Lopez]

YOU ARE THE SUN DIPPING INTO COOL NIGHT FOR THE VERY FIRST TIME. YOU ARE THE MAN, THE PIMP, THE MCDADDY OF THEM ALL. ORLANDO MURCIA, I'M SPEECHLESS.

[Francesca]

this is such a good poem!!! how does your brain come up with such beautiful comparisons and descriptions??
my favorite:
"You are like the sun dipping in cool night


for the very first time"

great poem!