Body language

I wrote a love letter
to your body...


I spelled out your name below your
navel In cursive

with my tongue...


You left no double spaces...

But only exclamation marks across your
lips

There was a question mark amongst your
thoughts...

when I went beneath your
unexplainable...


Apostrophe, comma... Was all you
seemed to reply with ...

I simply quoted...


Relax...




Period.





© 2013 Orlando Murcia

Reviews

[unsavable_soul]

Exquisite,
Your theme is seamless here, and the way you incorporate the punctuations into meanings of passion is very interesting. You create a good solid basis of mental imagery and then accent it with sentence structure within sentence structure. This is very unique and very well written, at least I can say I have never read a piece of this nature.

"I left no double spaces...
But only exclamation marks across your
lips... "

This set of lines was my personal favorite. It says so much sensually while remaining within it's given context, also giving clear mental imagery that is still left up to the reader to completely define. This Orlando is most excellent writing.
Thanks for it.
Sincerely
Christopher

[Orlando Murcia]

Wow! That's all I can say Christopher... Thank you so much for the wonderful review...

Which reminds me , I forgot to edit it... Thank you so much once again Christopher

[unsavable_soul]

My pleasure to aid or simply enjoy your art.
Chris

[DaniElle LaPointe]

Oooooooh shelving this one! Love it. I am digging the punctuation and it inspired me to try my hand at this style :D all I can do is rave with commas,,,,,,,,,

More,,,,,,

DaniElle :D

[Orlando Murcia]

Thank you so much! :-)

[Orlando Murcia]

I didn't use punctuation because ithere was no need for it to be used :-) it's awesome you noticed... :-D Thanks again :-)

[DaniElle LaPointe]

What next? What would you suggest of your other writing?

[Orlando Murcia]

A lot, I'm not that well educated in certain things so every little suggesti mean a lot :-)

[Orlando Murcia]

Suggestions*

[SyberRose]

Glad to hear you are good with punctuation haa....very creative Orlando as always.

[Orlando Murcia]

Thank you love Lol

[Orlando Murcia]

Which reminds me...

I have to change something

[SyberRose]

Oh okay...do you have to add some capitals or something...haa

[Orlando Murcia]

:-P don't forget punctuation lol...