Labyrnth

revised

its most difficult to stitch
crimson hands
when two have shattered
a double sided mirror
with only one part help
alone, that is yourself


if only you could feel beyond your lies
see beyond the flaws and deceptions
You have also surrendered
The truth shouts;
it takes;
your words to smooth out scars
your intentions to moisturize
we could all unwebb ourselves
untouched and compromised.


its most difficult to unstitch
knotted sins, old passions enriched
in a double layered labyrnth
with only one part help
alone, that is yourself


but you lack bravery.
you've changed into
something unfamiliar


your heart is so clumsy
you've aged and renewed
to one who's soul hinders

Author's Note

Eveyone's style is different. This is my own. Accepting all criticism.

Reviews

[Butch Decatoria]

The way you've written this piece seems as if you were lost a "labyrinth" lol. I myself am alittle lost as to the message or cohesiveness to the poem. You have great imagery here, and again the rhythm is like being in that maze, and this has a hint of moroseness against those who surround you. Thanks for sharing.

~~PFluffer (Butch Decatoria)

[Captain Ugly]

Striking piece. I' either take out ALSO or too in the second stanza; third line. It is a bit redundant. Other than that, I felt this piece. Good job.

Just Me.
Captain Ugly.