why does..

why does everyone have to be so mean

not everyone is a beauty queen

were all made different in gods eye

so whys there so much hatred in the sky

we all have our flaws

thats why we bawl

beauty is inside and out

no matter how many times you shout

the world will still be full of hatred

why does everyone pick on someone else

just because there a different race, a different sex, or just how they look

the world shouldn't be so cruel

because one of these days the victims will be you

no matter what people say

your beautiful in each and every way

 

<3 Cici

Reviews

[Ees]

Nice poem, nice concept! There are a few things that I feel I should point out:
In the fourth line you say: "so whys there so much hatred in the shy" "why's. But besides that it doesn't seem appropriate that you would list the hatred as being in the sky because that is where most people envision God to be and you have just stated that it was God who made us all different... if you can follow that...

"just because there a different race, a different sex, or just how they look"
just because they're a different race, a different sex, or just how they look.

first word in the last line should be: You're

[sierrasparks91]

thanks for the tips

[sierrasparks91]

i was just trying to rhyme but thanks for telling me that.

[Ees]

Oh no problem. I am sure that you can think of a rhyme that makes more sense.
Good job,
have fun!

[sierrasparks91]

thank you

[Belinda]

You are beautiful, no matter what they say. Don't let them bring you down! =)

[b.platte]

I agree. Everybody was made beautifully, as was this short and sweet poem. :)

[tamsin]

It's a good question...I'm not sure anyone has the answer. You put so much into your writing, it feels very raw, and real, and true.

[Cerise]

wooow...great piece..very nicely written..its high time people stop discriminating anoen on basis of sex religion caste, etc...very well done

[sierrasparks91]

thank you very much :)