Awakening

Through forests, through streams

I ran, a free soul, bound to nothing

The wind in my ears, whispering of a utopia

The sun of dawn, illuminating my path in gold

The birds above forming my crown, chirping joyously, leading my path.

 

Through the meadows I ran, one with the wind

The green plains, the blossoms, gently kissing my path

Weaving through the trees, accompanied by myriad animals

I was headed for the valley, the end of the line

The breaking of the final shackle, freeing from all bounds.

 

When at the edge, the zenith, I leapt forward into the unknown

The wind roaring in my ears, a warm cradle, rocking me gently

The serenity of the birds, the tranquility of floating clouds, forever mine

The valley below, nature’s playground, colors interwoven in delicate rituals

The azure sky above me, her mantle, wrapped tightly into infinity.

 

As I soared ever nearer to the sun, I felt a clarity absent before: an epiphany

It was not the sun I sought, nor was it in the sky high above

But rooted it was on earth, in the beauty around me, in the heart of all I loved.

With the dawning realization, disappeared the everlasting dream, clarity was mine

And awaken I did from my deep slumber, born anew.

Reviews

[Dayran]

A person's faith reaches out to also see itself as the sovereign science. It's patience over the ages and its intuition about the opportunity presented today, in the world, entices it to step outside. This may be the beginning of the rest of your life. Looks to me like a great start.

[Sid]

Thank you!

[Aya]

nature crowns you king in this one
simply great write :)

[Sid]

Thank you!

[Frieda P]

I love when poetry reads like a subtle, coaxing lullaby, this is so soothing, it could lull me into a serene state of being. Adding this to my favorites.

[Sid]

Thank you, glad you like it!

[Sanjeeta Sharma Pokhar..]

Nicely fantasized. I now seldom wonder! and completely believe that all poets have their majestic ways to view the world. So, I do. Your poems made me feel like I am the one who is awakened.
Nicely written :)

[Sid]

Thank you, glad you like it!!

[Frieda P]

Did I say I like it? I love it! :)

[Sid]

Nice :D

[Kuhr Gred]

your poem is full of mysteries.. but I like it.. thank you for sharing :D
-Kuhr Gred

[Sid]

Thank you, glad you like it!!

[Jack Reaper]

to me this seems as though a dream of a lost and broken soul, begging for the light, maybe in death? then realizing all the good things around them, and not needing the dream of a "heaven" anymore, awakening to a new and better life for themself.. thats kinda what i took from it anyway. in any case, its beautifully written, some excellent vocabulary enabling the mind to picture everything. this is one of your best, my friend. which does say something since all your work is simply marvelous.

[Sid]

Yup that's what I wanted to convey, glad I could and btw I'm smiling from ear to ear after reading this review, Thank you!

[Mia]

WHOA! This is incredible. If I have said I have a favourite from you...forget that...this is it, this is wow!
"The serenity of the birds, the tranquility of floating clouds, forever mine
The valley below, nature’s playground, colors interwoven in delicate rituals
The azure sky above me, her mantle, wrapped tightly into infinity."
I am in love with those lines, beautiful imagery! Wonderful, wonderful work Sid!

[Sid]

Thank you Mia, you just made my day!

[Felecia]

0.0 this is like....mind blowing! I don't even know what to say....it's so freaking good! *sobs* so good...

[Sid]

Thank you, glad you like it!

[Becca Bishop]

Every time I read a poem from you I keep hoping that you'll branch out from your use of commas...then I actually read it though and I say to myself, "Self, shut up!!! This is amazing!!! He NEEDS those commas!!! You should be ashamed!!! You should be punished!!!" So I punished myself by looking up the history of the comma...*shivers* it was horrible.
But hey! Good write!! (That's all I was really trying to say) :D :D :D

[Sid]

Haha, thank you for the read and review Becca and as always your reviews are fun to read and I'm glad you like it!!

[Salar Majak]

this was beutiful, i read it twice, and i wanted to quote something but if i did i will have to quote the whole poem :P, amazing one, peaceful, loved it, keep up

[Sid]

Thank you Aurora, glad you like it!!