The White Shrine

A look at our dreams and their importance according to age...the white shrine signifies our dreams...

Crawling, a toddler

The simple joys, his guiding light

The white shrine, a speck, mountain top

The mountain path, winding and beautiful

The few thorns, easily traversed

The shining zenith, closing in...

 

Walking, a child

The mountain zenith, looming distant

The white shrine, larger, mountain top

The winding path, treacherous yet friendly

The tame mountain, myriad creatures

Some his friends, others but a hindrance

Still walking strong, ever closer...

 

Loping, a teen

The mountain peak, farther still

The white shrine, radiant, mountain top

The thorny path, unfriendly and unforgiving

The wild mountain, strewn with evil

Unhinged pleasures abound, attractive new thoughts

The simple joys, all but lost

An easy gait, getting farther...

 

Running, a young adult

The mountain crest, barely in sight

The white shrine, fading, mountain top

The bruised path, dimming and forgotten

Hidden from the eyes, lest searched for

The ominous mountain, a great void

Devoid of hope, lost among many thoughts

His gaze diverted, others in his life

Running away, farther away...

 

Loping, an experienced adult

The mountain crown, all but lost

The white shrine, barely visible, mountain top

The winding path, all but gone

Lost among many, forgotten into oblivion

The dying mountain, turning to sand

His gaze distant, fixed elsewhere

Slow running, hidden, the backdrop...

 

Walking, a graying man

The mountain summit, a new longing

The white shrine, rekindling, mountain top

The dead path, forging anew

The lost mountain, alive in anticipation

His steps tired, aimed for the shrine

Tedious walking, closing distance...

 

Crawling, an old man

The mountain pinnacle, achingly far

The white shrine, bright, mountain top

Hope all gone, out of reach

The mountain friendly, yet alone

The dream, too far...

 

A serene bed of white cherry blossoms

Peace at last, white trees all around

Branches adorned, white blossoms

Tranquil he looks, his dreams

Once distant, now his in death

The white shrine, finally his...

Author's Note

Just a little something I wrote a while back...tell me what you think!

Reviews

[Mia]

I enjoyed this poem very much...lovely imagery and beautifully worded! What really gets me excited with this poem, Sid, is the last stanza...
“A serene bed of white cherry blossoms
Peace at last, white trees all around
Branches adorned, white blossoms
Tranquil he looks, his dreams
Once distant, now his in death
The white shrine, finally his...”
Oh my...it’s brilliant!! I love it; I’m in love with it! It makes this poem for me! Wonderful work as always!

[Sid]

Thank you Mia, glad you like it! :D

[quinfinn]

some interesting word choices and some very deliberate and effective imagery. wonderful write.

[Sid]

Thank you, glad you like it!

[The Refined Poet]

this is so well crafted. loved all the feelings, emotions, and mind pictures this poem evokes.

[Sid]

Thank you, glad you like it!!

[Tex]

Outstanding! Just amazing. this should get entered in a writing contest. Beautifully done. I could see where you were going early on, then, the joy to see how you would take me there.

Just a wonderful write.

[Sid]

Thank you Nicholas, glad you like it!!

[rnuff]

Wow, i like this, has depth, beauty and feelings.
Very nicely expressed and written

[Sid]

Thank you, glad you like it!