Primal Night, Burning Moon

Primal Night, burning moon

Borne of the fountain

of eternity and immortality

Caressed by the zephyrs

of peace and tranquility

What secrets lie clasped

in the stillness of your silence

What eternal pain do you suffer

by the electric lightning

that splits across your ribs

 

Dawn is a denouement of love

between two unrequited lovers

destined to suffer alone

And Day scorned as it is

goes on inflicting pain

on eternally scorched Earth

guilty of being ruined

by your sweet embrace

 

Author's Note

Bitten by the Pablo bug.

Reviews

[Robbie~xoxo~]

This is Beautifully written... It reminds me of a movie titled "Ladyhawke" (1985) with Rutger Hauer and Michelle Pfeiffer...

"Dawn is a denouement of love
between two unrequited lovers
destined to suffer alone
And Day scorned as it is
goes on inflicting pain
on eternally scorched Earth
guilty of being ruined
by your sweet embrace"~ Absolutely captivating!!

[Lipstick_Lesbian]

My god, this is gorgeous. I tried to pick a favorite line, but I couldn't. The whole thing is just beautiful. The imagery! *drools* Excellent work.

[Prashanth Ashok]

Beautifully written :)

[An owl on the moon]

You speak with an eternal tone humming through each line... vast and intimate, there is that unspoken fragrance that is poured over lovers that only they can smell... and often wish they could forget... Brilliant write.

"Someday, somewhere - anywhere, unfailingly, you'll find yourself, and that, and only that, can be the happiest or bitterest hour of your life”
― Pablo Neruda

[Everett DeValle]

Beautiful poem my friend...I'm a huge Pablo fan, I just admire his passion in writing...anyhoo, those lovely poisonous nymphs that control most men desires, is some times crazy bananas. ;)

[patricia]

so much to imagine here,...dawn ruining day in sweet embrace...
night and moon born of eternity...peaceful, secretive and silent, yet suffering. two stanzas embracing such vastness, this is beautiful in it's tortured ecstasy. Thankyou.

[Gandré]

It's all universals.. and there's such a beauty to put fingers on.. it's extrapolated. the author is aware of space like correlation.. like the "romantic metaphysics" here.

[Cassie Fraga]

wow!! your work never lets me down!! honeybee this was an AMAZING WRITE!! BRAVO!! BRAVO!! **throws roses at the screen** just beautiful in emotion!!

[Robin]

an infinite expanse that collapses around the heart , that lays within a touch , an embrace , excellent writing my friend

[paul]

and round and round it goes... powerful beautiful stuff here.