That Girl

An experimental poem in which I have followed a recursive style that you will get to know as you read the poem.

Days pass by quickly

Nights are quicker still

Memories coming back afresh

Making the consciousness whirl

And swirl sending me into a tizzy

Dizzy with alcohol and drugs

And the lingering memories of that girl

Who stayed on for a fleeting moment

A moment that became an eternity

An eternity that swallowed me whole

Only a part of me remains

That exhorts me back to life

A burning life hauled over the burning coals

Searching everywhere for some sanity

Or a semblance thereof or a cure

A cure for my bleeding heart

An anodyne for my vanity

Reviews

[Sel Whiteley]

This truly shows how love lingers forever and its a feeling I can relate to. You show the psychological instability of the persona brilliantly not only through the words but through innerrhyme and the fast pace, good stuff.

[paul]

well, at least a part of us remains...
really beautiful poem that spoke to my soul
excellent writing

[Wallflower]

Incredible poem.

"Who stayed on for a fleeting moment
A moment that became an eternity
An eternity that swallowed me whole
Only a part of me remains"

The imagery of time is vivid...vast and instantaneously halted. Days, night, moments, eternities. I enjoyed this a lot. The words are so full of meaning that they need to be said effortlessly which you have done. The flow is a great compliment to the substance of the poem.

[Robin]

ah yes, that girl .. you write of her well .

[SprunkedAlien]

Great writing...

[Gone]

Wow, ythis is good writing! So emotive and the story of lost love. I like your writing. please keep posting more.

[Christie Moses]

Emotive writing I can feel deeply.

[Christopher.Holmberg]

Orgasmic! 10/10

[An owl on the moon]

She seems to linger on, and her story within you is vast... These lines create a feeling of depth to you and her... together once, now worlds apart.

[LucifersWarrior]

I think this is really original. You have potential.