I still keep waiting for you

I STILL KEEP WAITING FOR YOU

When I fell for you

I never knew that

I would never get over you

I never knew that

I won’t be able to forget you

However hard I was trying

To stop my eyes from crying

After you gave your heart to him

Never ever caring for someone

Who listened to your every whim

Who was thereafter broken

Whose feeling deep inside his soul

Was never ever spoken

That person was me

That fool was me, you see

And I was so insane

My thoughts were so mundane

I kept caring about you

I kept waiting for you

Thinking, hoping that someday

My feelings will reach your mind

And you would unravel, you’d say

Till this time, where’d I been

I’d been confused, I’d been depressed

When I saw you sneaking out

To meet him in the weirdest of places

And then you were making out

My insides shuddered

The pain in my heart crucified me like hell

And I achieved an agonising pain

Too grotesque and vile to tell

And then he left you for another one

And you were in similar state as mine

I thought now was my chance

To make every wrong actions fine

I thought now was my chance

To convey why I chose to cross the line

But like the tree gets new leaf

After the older one leaves with the wind

Similarly you found a new love

I broke again this time, it actually seemed

Go to hell, I would move on

But still I cared and never moved on

And again you were left heartbroken

Again I looked at you with hapless eyes

And again you did diverted your gaze

You wouldn’t look at a guy so nice

Because nice guys are losers

Their heart is meant to get broken

Such was the philosophy of my sanity

But your memories took over it too

And like an innocent deluded fool

I am still waiting for you

How long…

How long…

Reviews

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24/7 I'll be waiting...out in the rain till somebody saves me...don't care if it takes....forever to make you believe!

This song I remembered just when I reached the last line of your poem.....You let yourself wait for someone and the "someone" takes too long to get it...and you don't care if you turn old in it!!
Why and how I don't know..but my analysis found such painful situations....All the luck of happiness to them who are going through in this sort of...
Nice read😊

[Shubham Sharma]

Thank you. Constructive reviews like this are always yearned for.

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👍👍👍👍....!!

[Najam Us Saher]

Sad tale. I can feel your emotions.
Just like loving a person some heartbreaks are so close to heart that one keeps them close to their heart despite having no hope to be together.

[Les Chats Heureux]

This kind of structure of poetry is not really our cup of tea; to be honest.
Because of it lenght more rhyming would have helped with the rythm.
The content is good but there was something about the structure that made the reading harder.

[Shubham Sharma]

Sorry but that's just the way I write. Many have criticised me for it deeming it as an example of bad grammar. But I just write, without thinking, without polishing. It's the only way I keep my anxieties at bay.

[barleygirl]

Your description of wanting this other person sounds a little scary. The narrator sounds like a stalker who won’t get over this other person. To me, this is not a normal amount of wanting another person. This sounds like a possessiveness that comes from wanting another person for your own satisfaction, not becuz of love for this other person. You only describe wanting this other person, like an object, rather than describing this other person as a complete person& showing the reasons why you think this person is someone you want to be with. I would hope that such a person (like this narrator) could finally see his/her own value cannot be found in being obsessively adoring of another person. Better to be a whole person, complete, without needing another person so badly to feel OK! Your expressions are vividly described to be extreme, even if it doesn't sound like a healthy attraction. (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Shubham Sharma]

Well thank you. Actually I wrote this poem remembering an incident. When I was in 10th grade, due to my introverted nature and absolute frankness I didn't had friend for years. I was alone until this girl comes in my life and changes me. She was like a healer and due to some reason or other the morale of love(or rather lust) we get from watching movies got over me. And I professed to her and she was hurt. Because due to her over-friendly nature she was called as s**t by others and I was the only boy she had befriended and trusted. But I was too deluded to see I was wrong. I hacked her fb account and did lot of terrible things so that I could coax her to fall in love with me. Years passed, she hates me so much now she ignores me in the public and wouldn't talk to me ever. So reflecting upon that I wrote this poem.

[barleygirl]

It is unusual for a guy to be so honest with himself. Being honest is how the best writing starts!