indifferent

this happened on one rainy afternoon when i stood by the door gazing into the pond in my house when i spotted this stork and suddenly wished i were there along with it Unperturbed and indifferent

"I wish i could stand like that stork in the rain
Unexpected,unimpressed,indifferent to all that surrounds
I wish i could stand on the edge of an abyss...
without the fear of falling beyond
I envy that stork who is lost in 
the music of the rain
And wish i could shut myself out
Oblivious to taunts and faults
I wish the raindrops would wash over me
so that all i can feel is the cold and freeze
And i wish i could shake off wet
like that stork in the rain
Unperturbed,unimpressed,indifferent 
to all that happened"

Reviews

[~Anita Sandlin~]

This is a very powerful write, I too know this feeling.

[KeeD]

"wish i could stand on the edge of an abyss...
without the fear of falling beyond" by far one of the best lines I've read in all of your poetry so far, so creative and hauntingly beautiful.
This poem has great imagery, it's calm and flows wonderfully.
This is an amazing metaphorical piece on new beginnings.

[being me]

thanks:)

[Pradeep Nair]

A stork won't catch a cold or fever.
The simile used here is commendable.
Good job.

[MOON]

Lovely poignant write , shaking off all the hurt and pain without a care in the world.

[being me]

exactly what i want

[rnuff]

emotional read, like it alot!

[Nithin Purple]

I wish i could stand on the edge of an abyss...
this line superb

[Nithin Purple]

wow sounds really indifferent, i like it very much.................

[being me]

one of my favs..till we meet again..bye

[Nithin Purple]

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