an unwritten melody

this is how i wanna be

"Wanna be free
I wanna be me....
Live like a song
An unwritten melody....
Want the breeze to play with my locks
Want the flowers to match my frock
Want the sun to shine on my cheeks
I want to dance in tune to an unwritten melody....
Now that i look at the blue-black sky,the stars are in my eyes
I feel the soft plush of the green grass as i hum to myself an unfamiliar song an unwritten melody......."

Reviews

[KeeD]

I like the rhyme scheme and it's a bright, cute poem:)

[The Dreamer]

'An unwritten melody" - wonderful name ......
"Heard melodies are sweet, but those unheard are sweeter"
- John Keats
an unwritten melody , may you be that much sweeter :)

[being me]

that was the inspiration:)

[The Dreamer]

really? a john keats fan. are you? :D

[being me]

ummm i haven't read much(sheepish)

[The Dreamer]

:P i havent either! :P - learnt that poem "Grecian Urn" in school - can't forget those lines - dont know why..

[being me]

hey me tooooo:D

[The Dreamer]

LOL :D

[being me]

:)

[Pradeep Nair]

We wanna be a lot.. and we sweat a lot to reach it...
occasionally we get a breeze, and sometimes a tempest..
really love the work..

[Salar Majak]

mmm, great, finally, the first sull of hopw poem i read today, thanks for that! i really needed it, and by the way never let anyone stop you from being you, because you are perfect, alwayse keep that in mind and fly!
great write, waiting for more.
Aurora

[being me]

thank you..your comments seem to boost me up for more..

[Salar Majak]

i'm really happy to help :) waiting for more great writes to come from your ink

[being me]

will do so

[vspjaguar]

this poem defines your nick I guess "being me". Nicely written!

[PoeticVandal]

A nice read... beautifully written.

[rnuff]

I really enjoyed this write, amazing write.

[Nithin Purple]

'Mind blowing and your liberty' you expressed through this! cool njoy write