The Serpent Cycle

The life, even in the skies, goes round in a cycle

While fighting with blazing arrows
And struggling against the mighty beast
Born in hell, and raised by the devil
On the dead and withered, they feast

Minions of the demons, they rise
Crawl out of the raging, fiery fire
They rip out the souls of angels, unaffected
By the soothing tune of the lyre

But the devil falls,
When the lightning of Zeus commands
In this chaos remains unheard, unheeded
The child crying in his mother's hands

While his father, the Gods keep fighting on
His mother, the Earth bleeds out
Into the ocean of tears, fed by rivers
Of fear, strife, arson and agony, shouts

And screams the name of the Lord for help
While the serpent strikes them down, as just
The wings of fire has burnt itself out
Reduced to ashes, the Phoenix crumbles to dust

But the circle of life remains incomplete
Until a fire from the ashes rise, a spark
Will start the symphony of the Phoenix
And rescue the night from the dark

That child is now young, and crisp
The Prince of the Castle of heaven
He picks up his bow and arrow and fires
As he had done, last night in sweven

The battle between the Gods and Devils
For ages has been going on and on
Like the serpent biting its own tail
In this cycle, the next Prince is born

Reviews

[Knight, not a Saint]

Out of this friggin' world man!!!.....phod dia tu!!
Simply amazing!!....Great imagery I have to say, completely evokes the sensation of a war of epic proportions. The flow is just brilliant and does its job perfectly well.
Congrats....this piece deserves to be where it is today.

[Shreyas Tripathy]

thanks a lot Deepesh bhaiya !!!
It means a lot :)

[Salar Majak]

oh my god!!!!!!! this is heart sweeping and breath taking! and a first try!! i love it love it love it, the usage of the symbol itself was amazing, and the way you used the rebirth ofthe pheonix in the flow! It's wonderful, keep it up

[Shreyas Tripathy]

Oh my god! I am overwhelmed by this review of yours! Thanks a lot !

[Salar Majak]

my pleasure :)

[Felecia]

Holy moly! This is freaking amazing! Jeeze Shreya! Write more like this! It's just....wow. It speaks so much to me. Love how you used Zeus in this! I looooove mythology, especially Greek, Roman and Egyptian. The demons and such, loved that part, and how you used the reference of God and Demons and such. Makes me think of a priest in a church doing whatever it is he does (I haven't been to church since I was really little) and this is just....wow.
I'm going to stop babbling now XD Thanks for this!

[Shreyas Tripathy]

Wow! You liked this piece so much? Thanks a lot for the review :D This actually was my first attempt at mythological writing

[Felecia]

Yes...I really did like it this much ahaha and it was a great first try!

[Mr Dunne Poetry]

Wow, this is such a great piece of poetry. I really love the indepth imagination used here. I feel you deserve a place in John's book. You have my support :)

[Shreyas Tripathy]

Thanks a lot !!!

[Mr Dunne Poetry]

Yw :)

[Mizuki Tsukiakari]

This is great! I can't even use words to describe this. This poem descibes the "cycle" perfectly. Great job! I love it!

[Shreyas Tripathy]

Thanks a lot !

[Mizuki Tsukiakari]

Your welcome! This was really good, I really enjoyed it :)

[John Phoenix Hutchinson..]

Congratulations this poem has been "approved" for publication in...

THE MAGICAL MYTHICAL MYSTERY COMPENDIUM.
-Metaphysical, Mystical & Fantastical Poetry of the Arcane

By John Phoenix Hutchinson and Others. (c) 2012

Please feel free to submit other poems as you are not limited to one entry. Also please write a short "bio" about yourself and send to me via private message. This will be published along with your poem. Thanks J.P.H.

Anyone wanting to make Submissions to this Writers Cafe "e" book Project can do so on my group page, the deadline is 1st of November 2012.

[Tina Kline]

Very nicely done. The tale of good vs evil is one that seems to be with us since the beginning. I like your unique style in the telling of this unending cycle. I think you did an outstanding job.

[Shreyas Tripathy]

Thank you so much for the review !

[rnuff]

Born in hell, and raised by the devil
On the dead and withered, they feast

love these lines, i couldn't even imagine that happening,
but yet that is whre sins started. The devil he's a mean one.
I"ve never met him, don't really want to.

This has a certain depth to it. Sounds like it took some
research to write as well. You are a prolific writer. This
is really awesome.

[Shreyas Tripathy]

Thank you so much ! You've always been a kind reviewer :)

[Sandeep]

The Concept of CYCLE has been very aptly described by the means of this poem.

And to have a "HATKE" (Unusually Perfect) {Pardon me for the Quotes :D } Theme to explain shows the tremendous courage with which you write.

The poem is written with a flow, it never breaks down as such.

But I do agree that the poem is not giving a striking explanation in the first read itself, but that's just the theme. The cycle goes on, stops for no one, everything around changes and waiting for no one and that's how the poem is written.

It's a very good write, It has an end that helps us understand the past making the poem related to each and every bit throughout.

One more important point i would like to mention is the picture that you selected.

I don't know if you saw the picture and wrote the cycle or u had it in mind and found the picture, any which way it shows what a wonderful Visionary you are..

And also the picture helped me better understand the poem,

It has the gods fighting (Head and Tail) the off spring is the body of the serpent which has to follow the cycle no matter what happens and how i see it, is that it is a sea creature i.e. Belongs to the Mother After all

Excellent Poem..

Aces !!! :D

[Shreyas Tripathy]

Thanks bro for the review !!! I am overwhelmed by it :)

[Sandeep]

Is that how u talk to an international business man!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Shreyas Tripathy]

Oh ! I am so sorry ... I really am ... I must have mistook you for a stupid friend of mine :P

[Mr. Moore]

I absolutely love this poem. Having such a consistent structure is extremely difficult, and it works wonders here. My only qualm is "fiery fire," but besides that, its wonderful.

[Shreyas Tripathy]

Thanks a lot! And I guess u are right about the fiery fire