Where am I?

Where am I?

Where am I?

All I can smell is dirt, everywhere.

I need help, I search for my voice over and over again, but can't seem to get ahold of it.

Can anyone see me from here?

Where am I?

Its so dark and I can't see a light anywhere.

I look up and I see darkness, OH! The sky!

Why is it so black? Shouldnt it be blue?

Whats going on, and Where am I?

Someone please come find me, I need you desperately right now.

I hear a bird, I look up for the second time this night, up at that ugly black blanket, called the sky.

When I look up I see a red-shouldered hawk.

I finaly find my voice and I scream, louder than I have before.

I look around at the trees, they aren't green and living, like they should.

They are dead, and I think I might be like them very soon & quickly.

Dead...and not living.

The trees are covered in spiders and I see a mexican redknee tarantula.

I know for sure im going to die, I'm getting ready for the nightmare.

 

Reviews

[jennifer little]

wonderful work on this i loved it and i liked the part around the ending dead and not living the trees are coverd in spiders and i see mexican redkee tarantula . i kno for sur im going to die im getting ready for the nightmare i enjoyed reading this lovely poem

[eatmills]

I love the rewrite. You've given it a whole new meaning. The imagery is so incredible,

[Ezel_Amaru]

Very well written.
The anxiety in the beginning I feel drew me in. Again visually I was there.
The cross between reality and dreaming was played with like jump rope.

[Cliff Rhodes]

Recurring nightmares: nice subject and good, deep, endless exploration to find their real meaning and solution. GREAT WRITE. Poetry is a safe outlet and so interesting to play the mental games of: (Who am I?), ((Where am I?) (What can I find in this space?).

[Kayla]

This is AMAZING! I can picture this through your poem! Great job!

[Wolfwind]

There are many things that spin into the imagination from these words. Many ways to look at the lines and see a different vista. I think overall the piece has a near death or end of days theme, while at the same time, it may be a vision of one's fears manifesting into dream creatures as night falls. Very nicely crafted!

Aaron

[BikerAngie]

Wonderful write! you had me from the first line!
Bravo

[closed..acct]

Dark and creepy I really enjoyed this write.
So nicely done.

[Eagle Cruagh]

This must be a Montana thing .
The wrtiing is excellent .
Great imagery .
Ilove it .
--- John