day in and day out

A poem that shows the transformation i experienced when i went through some hard times please leave a comment below mybe this piece will touch someone and help them grow as i did

Day in and day out
I scream but no one can hear my shout I plead and bleed and I try to make others see
or realize that I'm here and I care but still theres
nothing here but darkness and despair

I yearn as i turn
Making circles as i try to find a way out
but there's nothing but a toy and its laying on the ground
Waiting to be found as if spell bound

Pacing as im racing
I walk over and take a look its a boy
Acting as a decoy not a toy
Waiting to destroy the feeling of joy

The shift cant be dismissed
i watch as this boy turns into a man
As he withstands the demands
He commands to be left alone

I stair and it glares
Hes keeping me out its so strange
that this thing
has the ability to bring me pain

I can't believe what I'm seeing
the toy that was once a boy has turned into me
now I can see
what has happened to me

once a kid just playing his games has changed
into something that can really feel rage
and watch the the time ticks skipping whole days
just to makes other know he doesn't need them to pay
any attention to him he can walk away and let his life slip away
he's capable of bottling it up and storing It
away for days just so no one has to see this on
his face

days in and days out this boy screams and I shout
and I

Author's Note

Grammar earlier writing would like any feed back or even a hey I read this

Reviews

[I Am Svetlana]

I really dig your style, honestly. I also really admire how you're able to change the perspective of yourself when you were young & change it in such a way that the reader can understand. I can surely relate to this on many levels!

Beautiful write :)
Keep up the good work.
And yes, it is most important to stay true to yourself.

[The Black Warrior]

We all can relate to this one I believe! your way of writing is different which I find it neat... You should always be true to yourself...and try new things of course.

days in and days out this boy screams and I shout
and I shout... this last part stands out a lot!

he's capable of bottling it up and storing It
away for days just so no one has to see this on
his face ... I am pretty good at this :D LOL

This is nicely done :D and I like the vulnerability... how we all can relate to this one way or another.

[shocker]

Re-read it made some changes but towards the end im stuck on where it should be seperated and stuff

[The Black Warrior]

Pacing as I'm racing...The shift cant be dismissed

This gave power to your poem...you're good :D hehe

[shocker]

Thanks and i felt like the first 2 parts had like a line before the parts that shifted the ryme so i needed to have that patteren play out all the way through glade you like it

[The Black Warrior]

XD .......

[lovergirl]

hey don't stress up , that's how life supposed to be , like you said days in and days out ;)
nice piece boy :)