If The Sun Didn't Shine

It slightly dark...

Night, it sucks you in

Never to let go

Until the sun decides to show

But what if the sun doesn't shine

What could contain the darkness

That is pleading to grow

What immortal barrier

Could save our darkened fate?

If the sun refused to show.

Would darkness rear 

Upon all with fright

Would we succumb too our fate

Or would we drown in

A dark invading sea

To scream pleas on deaf ears

In the darkness of the night

What will happen 

without a hint of light.

Author's Note

Please review. Just another poem.

Reviews

[nono]

Very nice! It's true! This had me thinking what would people do if the sun didn't shine?......

[Franklin...]

"..save are darkened" our
"..succumb too our" to
Seems like you abandoned the rhyme in stanzas 4 & 5. Or maybe the rhyme in the others was incidental?
Nit-picking aside, this is an awesome "what if" poem. I like the imagery of a "dark invading sea". The last stanza prompts the reader to really think about the question for themselves. In fact, I wonder if using a question mark would be better than a period, though I'm not sure it actually matters. Really nice job.

[master squiggles]

This is nice. Good work ^_^ Good imagery, descriptions, etc.

[little lily Bride of Ch..]

i feel this happens in the world from the world being so messed up and so many not caring so much war and what not this is what this poem said to me don't feel the sun will ever stop shining Seems to only do that when we sleep at night but Interesting bit too dark for my likes i don't really fear the darkness why should we fear it if we have the Lord on our side. thank you for Sharing hope you have a amazing morning and afternoon God bless

[StacyPerry]

The poem stood out to me as one of many interpretations. Nice write.

[Undying Glory]

superb work, thought this was really great poetry. you've chosen a really good topic to write about, because we are simply so divided on this topic. there are those who hate the darkness, those who embrace its silence and beauty, and yet others who use it to strike upon their enemies. definitely makes one think. wonderful

[loowzerX]

excellent :)

[Ashley]

flows very well and powerful words creating strong imagery. well done

[Coyote Poetry]

Darkness use to be scary. I don't know if the minds of the new kids need more? A very good poem. I like the feel and the bit of fear in the words. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Robin]

very good writing , good posing of questions.