Never Coming Home

It's slightly dark.

In a crevice imbedded in to the Earth

The place I used to know

Where the darkness stole my soul

To be forcefully deleted from my mind

Hoping that one would come

I stood looking and searching

But to my plea, no one is here to save me

Burnt edges of my mind

From lost hope and denial

It struck me harder then any blow

To know that I'll never come home.

Reviews

[Angel Veselinov]

It is nice and profound piece :0 Thanks for sharing. Nice flow and rhymes :P

[Ashley]

its flows quite well and the link between lines it there but faint. i think more link between lines becuase its sometimes confusing would make it better. but a god piece of writing that suprisingly flows well

[Inci]

nice idea of a poem.. well written :) keep writing

[loowzerX]

A feeling of entrapment. very good :)

[Jonathan De Elvira]

I feel like I'm locked inside dark dungeon or somethin with so much feelings of hopelessness...
very good :)...Good writer always make the readers feel something from their work n u r no different..Keep it up...

[Brandon]

i feel the same way all to much great write keep up the good work



100/100

[Cassiopia Summers]

I love it, my favorite lines...
"It struck me harder then any blow
To know that I'll never come home."
Wonderful descriptions.
Superb write.

[Petal]

that was an awesome write

[Julia]

Holy s**t! this is really good muff!!
(shane im gonna call her muff and theres nothing u can do about it)

[ShaneBerry]

very surprising sarah lol, i didnt know u did poetry so well lol! great write! :)
it seems like you have alot of pent up emotions in this poem.