Bolted Doors

 

A shrill sound of cheerful laugh,
chases me,chases me to the farthest corner.

I sit alone gazing out of the window,
a glass pane hiding half the view.
I see the black clouds, covering the dark sky,
stars struggle hard to shove away the clouds and show off their timid light.
A tree stands shivering in the cold wind,
a leaf following the other leaf,
blown off its existence, tries to find its way in the disoriented wind.
I am so engrossed in this game of searching existence
when a chilly breeze passes by my cold cheeks, pinching them hard.
And the shrill sound of laugh stirs me from within, again.
A laugh which reflects content, happiness, trust, love and yet shrill to my ears.
I run, I scream, I screech....And my ears pain...
The black clouds come gushing towards my window,
leaves turn sharp swords and sway towards the window.

I run to bolt all the doors and windows tight.....Block all the ways to my ears.
And come back to sit at the dingiest corner,
And yet the sound finds its path to my scared ears.

Eyes closely pressed, scared to open,
And just something touches me,
a leaf, fluttering in the air,
touching the ground and making its way to me.
Oh, it doesnt pain, its not a sword !
I stretch my hand and pick it up on my palm
and see it closely, a dried leaf, detached from the tree, harmless.
An enthusiastic flier, closed withing the bolted doors.
I get up and reach for the window, open a pane, the air blows in and the leaf just flies away from my hand.
I stand gazing out of the half closed window
and the sound of the laugh reaches my ears again,
the shrill laugh follows again,

And just then a wild wind, forceful wind just thursts opens the other glass pane of the window,
the view is no-more Half.
 

Reviews

[sAM]

superb ..
some amazing images ...
keep up the great work ...
wish to learn more from you ...

[Rain]

Sheesh,
You can really force the reader to think. Some amazing images..the leaf not a sword, and then returned to finish its destined journey to land and be born, again. Very complex write, Rain,,

[Damien Dsoul]

Your're just so delicate when it comes to your poems, the way you pay intimate at the same time vivid attention in constructing them is so lovely to behold ... and to read through.

[SweetPeachesAlways]

A tree stands shivering in the cold wind,
a leaf following the other leaf,
blown off its existence, tries to find its way in the disoriented wind.

Such visualization! So beautiful, this imagery you paint with with, such a powerful image you send out...
Excellent writing....

[Going...going...gone!]

There's something so...so...I don't know, something so grey about the whole thing.

The images, the passions, the fears, the transition from partial to total viewing...everything is so well defined, and yet has a touch of, what do I say...madness? I seem to be at a loss of words in reviewing this piece...but all I can tell you is that I love it! It's a great piece...with subtlety and obviousness fantastically contrasted and juxtaposed together...

May God Bless You!

[Candle in the wind]

Very fear makes us bolt doors to shut out the storm but then it is much better to let it blow over at times.
"leaves turn sharp swords and sway towards the window" this meance gets difused when " a leaf, fluttering in the air,
touching the ground and making its way to me" and ...
"I stretch my hand and pick it up on my palm
and see it closely, a dried leaf, detached from the tree, harmless.
An enthusiastic flier, closed withing the bolted doors."
This is so true in so many contexts.

The disoriented wind like tempestuous thoughts and the shrill scream rage through the poem
Then it quietens down to be revoked again
The shrill laughter is so menacing

[PoemRodent]

This is a good write with lots of imagery but its a bit forced I felt.

Dostani

[Imperfection]

Love the descriptions. I can almost visualize all of it.
The title is captivating too and the way the poem ends is just outstanding.
I�m so glad I chanced upon this one�

[Crystal L. Test]

I liked the reviewer who said this had a "maddened touch." I felt like I was in a surreal universe as I read this. Quite like Alice in Wonderland. The use of imagery was very interesting. You definitely caught and held my attention. I also liked the 1/2 view of the window. For me, a new take on the glass is 1/2 full or 1/2 empty debate. Nicely done. Thanks for sharing.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

This is lovley to read.. very good use of words and imagery.. I love it ,nice job.

Chloe
xoxo