Stampede

A wide seamless road,
ends coalesced in the equator,
threatening loneliness prevaling on the way,
silent, so silent, breath sounds as an erupting volcano,
eyes see nothing, no-one just the endless road with no milestones.
Burning road, flames following the shadow.
Scorching sun and vultures flying high, locating a prey.
No sign of life, except for a walking body, treading the seamless road.
Aimless strides towards no-where.

Suddenly, something comes rolling, stamps:
But a stampede on an empty road ?!
A stampede, stamping, stamping harder...
Something just took the last breath,
eyes collapsed with the sight of the seamless road caught in them.
Vultures revolve around, fly low to land,
sounds of erupting volcano ticked away, crater has dried.

Succumbed to the stampede, ready for another seamless road.

Reviews

[Arab Spring]

waw..I think it deserves another reading..your words are very "yours", which is a rare gift!
Many people in this website merely list cliches!

I love the original images..
The elegent words..
And the wise editing!

I thank for sharing.

I want to read best of you..thus I am rating four!

Come on..show me your best!

Razan

[Rain]

I lost a long review..grrrr. Sometimes you waste magnificent lines. Rain..

[Going...going...gone!]

Aristotle once said that the "infinite is unending"...there is this sense of the infinite in your piece...

Somehow, I get the feel that amid all those dark images of desolation, of natural calamities, of birds of prey...there is a serch for the unending, for the infinite...and you seem ready to look for it, even if you have to face all that darkness and death.

Vivid imagery that makes you visualize every word as you read it...
I feel that the art of poetry is perfect only when the person reading it can see what the poet had seen while writing it...and that is absolutely what this work of yours does...anyone reading can see what you must have been thinking of, or imaging when you were writing the piece.

I am thoroughly impressed. Great piece!

May God Bless You!

[Candle in the wind]

Good to see stampede back.The images are very vivid and so is the desolation and the rolling stampede.

[SweetPeachesAlways]

No sign of life, except for a walking body, treading the seamless road.

Evokes melancholy...for what might be and for what might have been...

[A.J. Smith]

What an interesting place you take us to with this piece...very creative!

[Raef C. Boylan]

p.s.
"threatening loneliness prevaling on the way" (prevailing?)

[Raef C. Boylan]

Read your description - seems like an analogy/metaphor, but I'm not 100% sure what it's saying.
I like how descriptive this is, and the way that there seems to be more going on than meets the eye. Even when taken literally, it's an original portrait -
"But a stampede on an empty road ?!"

In terms of the contest, this either follows the rules or doesn't, and it depends on how literally this "stampede" is meant to be taken, because if it's about animals [possibly human animals] running from a volcanic eruption, then I'm not sure what this tells us about the narrator. If it's a metaphor for a broken down relationship, or something like that, then I guess it totally follows the rules because you haven't used first or second person singular...that in itself is rare these days, so well done, whatever the subject of the poem; even poems concerning nature generally involve a very human perspective.

Thanks for entering this.
Good luck.

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

I like this very much. Good descriptive poem. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[Crystal L. Test]

There is sadness here but also hope. After all, you were left standing after the stampede. To use your words "ready for another seamless road." For me, this means even though you feel beaten down, you recognize your strength to move on and possibly do it again. Very powerful imagery.

[Tomás Ó C..]

Great use of language here.