Perhaps you loved me anyway

I got a quote which said �Just because someone doesn�t love you the way you want them to, it doesn�t mean that they don�t love you with all they have� and as I read this I felt a spur to write...

 

I wanted you to look at me with drooling eyes,

When I dressed up for you.

But you preferred not looking at me at all,

You never noticed my new dress,

You never noticed those dangling earrings,

You never said “You look beautiful!”.

But perhaps you loved me anyway.

 

I wanted you to sit beside me and whisper in my ears,

When I saw other couples immersed in each-other.

But you always preferred a place not beside me,

May be you had something more important

In mind than to sit beside me,

May be you dint have anything to whisper,

Mostly I sat alone, wishing.

But perhaps you loved me anyway.

 

I wanted you to wait for me on the breakfast table,

And have your first bite with me.

But you always left before I could reach the table,

May be you have some undone work at office,

Or may be an important meeting with the CEO,

I never had my breakfast so.

But perhaps you loved me anyway.

 

Sometimes I wanted you to surprise me,

Take me out to dinner or a late night movie without being asked for.

But you were always caught up in something to ever plan a surprise,

I waited to feel special and important in your life,

I waited to celebrate so called important dates in our lives,

And waited for a surprise.

You never made an effort.

But perhaps you loved me anyway.

                                

I wanted you to curl up around me,

Like a quilt on those chilly nights,

Snuggle beside me and make me warm.

But you preferred sleeping on the corner of the bed,

With your body turned towards the wall,

And the bolster clutched between your legs.

But perhaps you loved me anyway.

 

                   

Author's Note

I haven't worked on the language as such and didn't do proof reading as well, wrote it as it came to my mind.

Reviews

[Candle in the wind]

That one had caught my fancy too among those quotes you had sent and that kind of consolation is so essential at times and this truly is a spontaneous overflow of "unpremeditated thought".I can feel it on my pulse.
Just a few suggestions:
"When I saw other couples indulged in themselves"
Perhaps you meant engrossed.
"I never had me breakfast so"
Perhaps it should be my break fast

It quite evidently was a strong spur that you felt.
"May be you dint have anything to whisper"
This line brings such a sense of desolation.

[Kara Emily Krantz]

that is one of my FAVORITE quotes, and i love what you did with it.

The repetition of "perhaps you loved me anyways" was fantastic. it really worked wonders for the piece, and wasn't the lame kind of repeating that distracts. it held it together perfectly.

and i've wondered this same thing myself. :) very well done!

[Kees Kapteyn]

The quote that inspired this poem has a good point, and it makes one think about the fairness that one might have given an ex. But the point you make is much more exact. I still would have been miserable and lonely had I stayed with all my exes, and i am totally over the moon happy with my wife because she loves me exactly the way I want to be loved. One should never settle for second best, or 'this will do'. We should all look for happiness in life and love.

[An Ordinary Woman]

I remember that quote very well. Knowing someone loves you with all they have even when it isn't enough is a hard place to be. I have been there myself and it is one of the toughest decisions I've ever made....

Your poem is both beautiful and sad. I enjoyed it, thank you.

[Robert Luna]

To often as a relationship grows people become to comfortable with one another and forget to do all the things that made one another fall in love with each other in the first place. I try my damnedest to show my wife I love her each day. I say it as much as I can and show it even more. She is my everything and my reason I exist. So this makes me appreciate her a little more as We are comfortable with one another but never forget to say I love you and show the world our love. She works in retail and works weird hours and stuff that sometimes makes it hard to spend as much time with one another as we would like to but helps us appreciate those times even more.

Your words are both powerful and stirring.

Great Job!!!!!!

[R J Askew]

It's tragic. We spend years looking for the right person. Find someone. Fall in love. Make a home together. Fall out of love as boredom sets in. And then spend decades being unhappy, or, more likely now, get divorced. Ach! Maybe solitude it best! Great mood piece.

[Just Manoosh]

The piece is an instant classic honey. Very well said and very well written..... not everyone is the same, we all show love in different ways. My husband does it by buying a certain brand of chocolates, then announcing to me "I brought your favourites"..... they have never been my favourites, they are in fact his.... I am actually sick of the damn things! laughing, but its his way of trying.

This write also emits loneliness, loneliness from difference. I would start looking at the things he does do (as with my chocolate confession) rather than the things he does not.

An excellent write.

Hugs
Mx

[Brenda Sue]

Very beautifully penned. Great job. I enjoyed reading it very much. Thank you for sharing.

[Gary H]

I really enjoyed the way you wrote this. There was something very fragile that made the whole piece endearing. These two lines I thought were particularly special - 'I wanted you to curl up around me, Like a quilt on those chilly nights.'
I would definately agree with your initial introduction to the poem and appreciate the doubts this sometimes causes.
Nice work.

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This is just so top-notch, and so mysterious as well. Romantic with enigmatic twists to it, and kinda heartbreaking as well. And a very beautiful picture with it too- luv it!! Excellent Piece, Very Excellent!!

Mikey

[Rain]

Lots of insightful longings in this.."Perhaps" I really liked this, because there are some parts where I see " perhaps" may fit, but most of what I read..whispered " Perhaps not." This was a poignant look back. Rain..