Perhaps you loved me anyway

I got a quote which said �Just because someone doesn�t love you the way you want them to, it doesn�t mean that they don�t love you with all they have� and as I read this I felt a spur to write...

 

I wanted you to look at me with drooling eyes,

When I dressed up for you.

But you preferred not looking at me at all,

You never noticed my new dress,

You never noticed those dangling earrings,

You never said “You look beautiful!”.

But perhaps you loved me anyway.

 

I wanted you to sit beside me and whisper in my ears,

When I saw other couples immersed in each-other.

But you always preferred a place not beside me,

May be you had something more important

In mind than to sit beside me,

May be you dint have anything to whisper,

Mostly I sat alone, wishing.

But perhaps you loved me anyway.

 

I wanted you to wait for me on the breakfast table,

And have your first bite with me.

But you always left before I could reach the table,

May be you have some undone work at office,

Or may be an important meeting with the CEO,

I never had my breakfast so.

But perhaps you loved me anyway.

 

Sometimes I wanted you to surprise me,

Take me out to dinner or a late night movie without being asked for.

But you were always caught up in something to ever plan a surprise,

I waited to feel special and important in your life,

I waited to celebrate so called important dates in our lives,

And waited for a surprise.

You never made an effort.

But perhaps you loved me anyway.

                                

I wanted you to curl up around me,

Like a quilt on those chilly nights,

Snuggle beside me and make me warm.

But you preferred sleeping on the corner of the bed,

With your body turned towards the wall,

And the bolster clutched between your legs.

But perhaps you loved me anyway.

 

                   

Author's Note

I haven't worked on the language as such and didn't do proof reading as well, wrote it as it came to my mind.

Reviews

[Candle in the wind]

That one had caught my fancy too among those quotes you had sent and that kind of consolation is so essential at times and this truly is a spontaneous overflow of "unpremeditated thought".I can feel it on my pulse.
Just a few suggestions:
"When I saw other couples indulged in themselves"
Perhaps you meant engrossed.
"I never had me breakfast so"
Perhaps it should be my break fast

It quite evidently was a strong spur that you felt.
"May be you dint have anything to whisper"
This line brings such a sense of desolation.

[Celtic Cat]

Oh this is a great piece and thanks to Manoosh for recommending the read. It's true, we don't always get loved the way we want....
This piece makes me a little sad because I couldn't finish that sentence above with "but at least we are loved"...because....this piece is filled with Perhaps.
I also feel cold when my man chooses the corner of the bed to being wrapped around me...but we do both so it balances out. I only caught one typo, so not bad in the free flow non proof read piece! This piece is full of heart and longing, it speaks volumes and I'm sure too many of us can relate. Excellent write!

[The wanderer...]

I really liked the concept. very realistic and nicely conveyed.

[OceanTropic]

Omgawsh. This is so sad, but it is the typical girl. "False hope" as I would say lol. Always hoping and hoping and believing that maybe one day they would do something for you, maybe they would realize how much you are there for them, how much you care, and in return be so soft and kind to you. Instead they act like they expect all of this from you, and take and take and never give back. This is so sadd it realy touched me. :(

[ah]

this portrays sadness in my eyes, i really love this writing, it brings a lot of emotion with few words, thanx for asking me to read

[Debra Stevens Edwards (..]

This is a well written piece and I love it but, I would have ask if he loved me. If he said yes, then I would tell him, That he didn't need to show the world but He did need to show me.
Debby

[Damien Dsoul]

Perhaps it's the irony that's much too bitter than the obvious, or perhaps it's simpoly because the world sometimes doesn't always assume the shape that you want it to be. But other than that, your poem so excellently mirrors that ever-changing face of humanity.

[BrightEyes]

actions truly do speak louder than words - the words are so easy to say - but it is the little things that people do or don't do for you that make you feel loved and special. You've expressed those feelings so well here - how we can hear the words but when the actions speak the opposite be left feeling lost and forlorn.

laura

[None]

Yes, those three words, "I love you" are easier to say than to actually take the time to show you mean them. Great repetition of "Perhaps you loved me anyway," and a fantastic title. Your poem shows the importance of the little things that put the spark in a woman's heart. It always comes back one hundred fold to a man. If they only knew the secret!
Life is way to short to spend it playing second fiddle, the music is so much sweeter when you are the priority. Your poem means so much to me and I am placing it in my favorites.
p.s. If you ever write a part II to this, you could include: writing a beautiful poem from the heart for someone and they never even noticed!

[E. M. Murren]

Ah, yes. I have lived this. LOL So well expressed. Life is seldom what we would have it... so I am working toward giving up expectations... they get in the way of happiness. LOL Really fine work here.

[Captain Blackheart (The..]

I know the saying. This is a wonderfully written piece, well expressed and presented. Myself I have the most amazing relationship with the girl of my dreams and I will never forget the love I hold for her and how much she means to me. Everyday with her is magical. A wonderful write!!!