A Poem About Sleep

My eyes are heavy 

all I want to do is sleep 

but I want to stay up and create more things

My eyes are water 

but I keep wiping them just in case I wake up

My body is weak

It's heavy and ready for sleep

I wish I can think but it seems 

like I have been blocked by my sleep

one more sentence 

one more word

just hold on until 

I finish what I wanted to say

I can't hold on 

the sleep is to heavy

it seems I can't get back the energy I lost

thinking of coffee

but no then i will really stay up

can't fight my sleep

I'm drifting like a feather slowly rocking back and forth

that is what i feel 

that is what I feel 

ok..ok.. 

awwwnnnn.. yawning 

awwwnnn... stretching

kicking the covers over to side I won't need them 

If I tried to get them in the middle of the night

but for now I'll just push them 

far and wide

feeling lazy

feeling like I am on my last run

yup sleep has hit 

good night sun.   

Author's Note

let me know what you think thanks!

Reviews

[Marshall]

Its OK. Lots more work required on this one. Although ti reads like an abstract poem, it needs to lift itself off the page with a message or a thought or a sparkle that will endear the reader to what it is saying.

[Shimae Parks]

I couldn't change this one because It was how I was feeling at that time, at that moment so changing it would change the whole concept of what I felt when I was writing it but thanks for your review

[FreeThinker]

remind me of when i dont want to fall asleep really great

[Shimae Parks]

yes I was half awake writing it so ye,s that is how I felt last night. :)

[Shimae Parks]

my comma was in the wrong place I ment to say yes then a comma :)

[FreeThinker]

its really beautiful

[A. Amos]

Interesting write and truly enjoyed the read...

[Shimae Parks]

Thank you so much it really means a lot!

[A. Amos]

You're most welcome my dear..