The candy that ate me!

seating in my room playing candy on my phone

seems so quiet but thats how i like it

no distractions 

no little kids

just me and you

 I mean the candy 

not like silence on a night like to night

nothing to worry about

nothing to stress about

just when I get ready to play 

I fall asleep as soon as I play....

twiddle twiddle far and wide 

something in my eye 

maybe I am dreaming but it seems like the candy is alive

looking down on me 

smiling and laughing 

not sure what to think

is it really the candy

no..no... I must be sleeping 

but my eye is open 

or is it close 

let me open up my eyes to see if I am 

now that I'm awake 

this bad dream will disappear

but it hasn't and they are still there

I must have brought them from my dreams

and now they are here to eat me!

oh dear... 

oh dear...

awwmmm..

Author's Note

please rate my work thanks!

Reviews

[1Disawsum]

very random but a cool poem. You may need to work on the flow a little, but other than that, it's quite a cool, laid back poem to read! No need to add 'the end' to it, it ruins that special 'something' in this poem. Just end it at 'awwmmm..' is more than sufficent is enough. On a said enote, loved the last 3 lines, minus 'the end' line! 'oh dear...' aha very funny!

[Shimae Parks]

thank you for your review!

[Marshall]

yes. This one is stepping into the genre of delicate poetry because it shows a distinct clever dialogue that is crystal clear in diction and content. The structure of the stanzas also enhance the idea of a game. Its good.

[Shimae Parks]

thank you :)

[Dash the Reaper]

awesome piece i love it,,,,,,

[Shimae Parks]

Thank you means a lot !

[Jennifer Johnston]

Candy Crush addiction? Hilarious :)

[Shimae Parks]

Yes and its the worst ;)

[Jennifer Johnston]

Very funny!