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She lives inside her own heart

The one breaking apart

She lives inside her own soul

Emotions her pallette of art

She wants to hide somewhere, anywhere

Foreign, Secret and Dark

So they can't see

The tears she cries from her weary eyes

Liars, cheaters, and theives in disguise

They play upon her fears

Whisper lies in her ears

Is happiness just an illusion

Does she dare ask

Must she forever wear the solitude mask

 

 

 

Reviews

[Owlgirl]

Wow! Great poem! Amazing wording, I love the line "Emotions her pallette of art"! Great flow! I'm not sure of you wanted to have a rhyme scheme, but you may want to make the whole poem fit with one, or loose the rhyme scheme. Overall, this is an exceptional and very well written poem!

[Jack Isaac]

"She lives inside her own heart" but they can see her there so she wants to hide somewhere dark. Must she always wear the solitude mask? ... if she Wants to, then yes, she must. The problem is, They keep telling her what she wants. I think She's just waiting for someone to tell her to take off the mask and be happy... then, yes, she will be happy.

I do like the logic in your writing. :)

[L0v3craft]

yep, that's me XD

[Jo March]

Favourite one of yours. I can truly relate. Beautiful.

[Aehr]

Very good flow, the title is amazing, it adds to the mystery. I like the heartfelt emotions. Very nicely done.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Deeply emotional and questioning write. I have asked myself more than once if perhaps i should draw inside myself and stand alone to avoid the pain of life.

[Layla J Omorose]

I agree this was a very good poem.The rhyming of it made the poem flow smoothly and the words rolled right off the tongue beautifully. I also agree that though I liked the rhyming, it should have had one continuous rhyme flow. But either way this was a great piece