Power?

Power?

A Poem by Danielle

If I had the POWER
There'd be NO 
FEAR
So there'd be
NO 
HATE
PREJUDICE
RACISM
BULLYING
LOWERCLASS
MIDDLECLASS
UPPERCLASS
POVERTY
CRIME
PRISON
If you had the POWER
What would you do?

© 2012 Danielle


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that's a very honest and good thought. power... something with which you can do anything... leaves you with a big question mark lolz.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Thy pen is mightier than the sword, but get what you're saying. If I had the power, I'd do just the same and more. The ideas are flowing and credible. Excellent read and write.

Posted 12 Years Ago


I like how deffinitive you are in this. This is how it's going to be, no ifs ands or buts about it. It's a strong piece, almost shouting at a reader. That's a good thing considering it is full of strong ideas and principles.
Small suggestion leave out the words classes of. You cover them with lowerclass, middleclass, and upperclass. Leaving in the classes of makes the next three redundant and takes away from the piece.

Posted 12 Years Ago



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Danielle
Danielle

Beckley, WV



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