I want

I will let the poem speak for itself. I wrote it December of 2010.

I want a simple kind of life

I want to be a simple woman

I want peace within

And to do without my sin

Men

I want to attack with the pen

And to live beyond the past of where I have been

I want a dream fulfilled

And to have this brokenhearted soul to be healed

Reviews

[Rosey]

I love this. I can absolutely relate to that desire for simplicity, as well as for peace. Oddly enough, I also relate to the attacking men with a pen thing, except it was actually my sister who wanted to the attacking. :) I personally am going through a time of peace and letting go of my past, so this really spoke to me. Great write!

[J. Write]

Simple but strong. I loved it.

[Dr. Wood ?]

Very well constructed piece...Short and well executed....Speaking as a MAN though..we are not all pigeons from the same hole...Great write though, all the same

[EvErEyEs]

Short, simple, but very bright. :)

[Jo March]

Ah I relate to this so much. Men are sin. Lovely. So to the point and poignant, very emotive.

[Aehr]

very nice... Desires spoken, straight from the heart here. Very honest and I loved this line
"I want a dream fulfilled"
Its like you really want that happening and that you'll do anything for your dream to come true. Great job here.. keep writing
Rhea

[Jack Isaac]

It would seem the dream to be fulfilled is given in the first three lines, and that which heals the soul is in the fourth line. So, in that respect, this poem has beautiful symmetry of quatrain structure. The pivot (or hinge) here is the word "men" at dead center. That's an extraordinary line of thought, not simple at all. Aside from that, this work is a nice flow of sentiment. Nice work.