Forget

Forget

A Poem by busymommy04

Forget

Forget him
forget his face
Forget his kiss
his warm embrace,

Forget the love that you once knew
remember he has someone new

Forget the times he held you tight
remember he's with her tonight

Forget, all the love that you shared
cause he's with her now so he never cared

Remember when your heart, opened up
to have him stab it, man that sucks

Would you ever leave me? NEVER!
well he LIED cause he's gone forever!



 






© 2013 busymommy04


Author's Note

busymommy04
I changed the ending of the poem.

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Not bad. I think the last couplet is a little trite and you might want to rework it a little - it's just anticlimactic compared to the buildup in the first part of the poem - but other than that, you've expressed yourself very well here. Well done.

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Posted 11 Years Ago


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Great poem! Beautiful and true in so many ways! I wish I could write poetry like this.

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Posted 11 Years Ago


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Added on March 10, 2013
Last Updated on March 13, 2013
Tags: poetry, love, romance
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I'm a mother of 4 children, 5 and 3 yr old girls and 7 month old twins (boy and girl). I served in the US Army and have been in the food service industry for 9 years. I have been writing since I was .. more..

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