Not mine

Yearning for something against your better judgement

Sweat dripping from your body,
Salty,
Staining the sheets of my life,
Consuming the measures of my song,
You rule me……..
In every distinction, field, and dimension.

Hmph…


You barged into the depths of my soul without so much as a knock,
controlling the tempo of my thoughts,
the waves of my body,
forcing yourself into the dark alley of  my heart,
through every caution, exit, and detour sign I managed to distribute.

I yearn for you against my better judgment.

I haven’t let the fact you have a wife hinder my thoughts....
what kind of being does that make me?
To enjoy a man so much that I hold his destruction in my palms.
I’m so selfish that I want you to myself; no one else,

Once I discovered the broadness of your shoulders I couldn’t let go.

Help me somebody.

Reviews

[613]

"so much as knock" should say "so much as a knock".

I suggest, "I’m so selfish that I want you to alone and to myself" to be "I'm so selfish that I want you alone and to myself" or "I'm so selfish that I want you to be alone and all to myself". Something like that. Haha.

Overall, this was written well. As for the content . . . not a fan. But that's just due to my personal beliefs.

- Brittney

[Shae]

Thank you ! I knew I had a couple typos that I missed. The poem itself isn't an affair it's about lusting after someone you can't have . I try to write about desire in my poetry or other works because at some point we all partake in desire maybe not in this extent but it's evident in some form lol

[613]

Ah, gotcha. Haha.
& you're welcome!

[Gee]

I'd imagine, never been there, the lusting is probably better than the getting, especially when the one lusting is the unwanted third party, at least by the one being cheated on, if that makes sense. Anyways I like this

[marcus]

wow! That's really good.

[Shae]

:-) Thank you!

[Coyote Poetry]

Few times do we know wisdom in love.
"I yearn for you against my better judgment."
The above lines is true place for the most of us. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Shae]

Thank you for your review! I think you're the first to understand that this isn't about me and I don't need some type of help LOL.

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoy your writing. I will come back tomorrow and read more. I'm off to work.

[Shae]

:-) Thank you, have a great day at work

[Willard Wells]

Yep, time to look for a new unencumbered lover. The pleasure and excitement can be great, but in most cases you do not win and are left standing alone. Nice work.

[Shae]

Thank you, this poem isn't based on real events lol . Thank you for reviewing and advice :-)!

[MinorArt]

I hear ya, sister! Poems great: fast, robust, anxious. I can really feel
The angst and turmoil through tone and structure. I adore the first 2 lines, very raw, very fitting. I hope it works out for you.

[Shae]

Thank you for your review!