Do I

I wanna know

Do I give you shivers when I whisper in your ear

Do I make your heart race when I flash you a smile

Do I frustrate you like you frustrate me

Do I make you crazy when we're apart

Do I bring your hopes up

When they seem so down

Do I get your attention even when we aren't talking

Do I make you feel like your life is great

Do I make you love me so much it hurts

Do I occupy your thoughts

Even when they have nothing to do with me

Do I drive you to be the best version of yourself

Do I make you forget everything wrong in your life

Do I make your words tangle together

Do I turn on your switches

as much as you turn on mine

Do I come to your mind first thing every morning

Do I join you in your dreams at night

Do I put the pieces of your heart together

because you set mine right again

Do I make you happy

Do I? Cause you make my life feel right

Do I? Cause you do it all to me

Reviews

[Kyle Sky]

Well written. The theme and mood can be easily understood and much admired. The flow was quite good and structure added to its attractiveness in rythm. the starting of the poem was expressed wholeheartedly. On the other hand, the words read in the later lines expressed the idea less attractively as it was in the start. the emotion is there, but I think you could've done better with your word play. This poem do have some potential to be redone. Anyways, I think it's a wonderful piece all the same. Great job.

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Lots of food for thoughts here with the questions... you have to take aback to them and read... consume for what they are worth... and ask them one by one...

[Sami Khalil]

Do I feel good when I read your good poetry ...Thank you for sharing...:)

[sheila.j]

:) thank you for taking your time to read it

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[Ohhhwillow]

This is a unique take on the complexities of love, Sheila. It is simple, and that is its merit, you definitely are on to something here. Because you zero into this technique, beginning 5, then 4, 4, then 3, and 3 again lines in a row with the same two syllables, it is crucial, in my opinion that what follows is strong and refreshingly put. Perhaps look over some of these lines again and think how you can express these thoughts in a new way! :) Also, ending your poem on "Do I make you happy", I feel, would exemplify the reality that faces all relationships, the ultimate question we all ask at some point of other! The following two seem rushed and insincere.. I do not mean to be harsh, I hope this might have helped haha, I'm sure you understand extra criticism of romantic poetry is sometimes needed, as it's most popular and often cliche

[sheila.j]

I definitely understand the criticism and thank you for your insights :) maybe someday I'll go through this poem and try to improve it

[kublakhan27]

Very nice, sounds like something one would write for a first love...nicely done :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

very sweet romantic peace once again. Was it about the same guy? It has so much meaning and it was well set out. The title of the poem is perfect. Enjoyed reading that quite alot :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

awwww its cute and sweet great write :)