One

One

‘Are you ready, Astrid?’ asks Lis.

She stands in the doorway, a rucksack on her back and her favourite burgundy woolly hat on her raven black hair. I smile; Lis has always been the prettiest out of us with her chocolate brown eyes, slender body and high cheek bones. She was perfect looking, not too skinny nor to large, just right. I slip my last top into my bag and sling it onto my back. I put on my boots and grab my brown hat; I push it onto my head.

‘Yes!’

She smiles, ‘good, because you're driving.’

I laugh, ‘I'm the only one who can drive.’

‘I'm getting my license soon, I just don't have the money for it.’

‘I'm surprised your mom gave you the money for this trip.’

‘She didn't, I had to basically beg my dad to buy it for me,’ she scoffs, eye brows raised.

I laugh and we walk out of my room.

‘We need to pick up the other girls; they're at Issie's house.’

‘If we miss our plane, I'm blaming you!’ I tease.

‘It's your fault we're late, you were supposed to be here at three!’

I look at my watch.

 'You were ten minutes later,’ the bags go into the boot and we slip into the red car.

‘I actually can’t believe your mom brought you a 1957 Ford Thunderbird Convertible just for this trip.’

I wrap my hands around the steering wheel, ‘me either,’ I sigh delightfully.

Lis chuckles, ‘I so wish your mom was mine.’

I smile and start driving to Issie's house.

‘My mom was giving me the stranger danger discussion and my dad gave me these…’ she opens her bag and pulls out a large box of condoms. ‘He said that he knew what I’m like.’
‘What, a s**t?’ She laughs along with me, lightly slapping me on the arm as I pull over.

I honk the horn and a few minutes later, Issie, Gaby and Millie walked over to us. Their bags also get thrown into the boot before they slip into my car and we head off.

‘So girls, we have an two hour’s till out plane goes off, an hour to get there and just another hour for spare’ Lis says.

Issie giggles at her, ‘calm down, Lis. We’ll be there on time.’

She smiles, ‘sorry, I’ve just wanted this for ages.’

‘Don’t worry. It will go alright. Not perfect, but when has anything been perfect?’ Gabby says.

Lis laughs.

‘Well a part from Lis herself,’ I butt in.

We all chuckle at the statement.

‘Yeah, a part from you,’ Millie nudges Lis, she smiles.

‘Speaking of you Lis, I’m surprised you want to go camping,’ I glance at her, and then back to the road, ‘no offence or anything, but you don’t seem like a camping sort of girl.’

‘I’m not,’ she says bluntly. ‘But, you’re never too young to try something new and wild!’

I laugh, we all do.

‘I like the new car, by the way Astrid.’

I glance to Gaby.

‘Thanks.’

‘Her mom brought it for her, just for this trip!’ Lis butts in.

‘Hey, not just for the trip. I can use this car again and again!’ I protest.

Lis smiles, ‘but your mom made sure you got it ready for this trip.’

‘Seriously Lis, it’s after graduation, my mom brought it for me.’

‘I wish my mom did that,’ she pressed herself against her chair.

‘Anyway, let’s stop talking about school! This trip is to forget about College for a month or so!’

‘Yeah, talking of that Millie, why are we only aloud to bring one bag? If we’re going to be in L.A for a month or more, don’t we need a suitcase?’ Lis says, turning her body to them.

‘No, we can buy more things there. You have money, right?’

‘Yeah, course. My dad paid for the trip and my mom gave me the money.’

‘More like, your dad paid for the whole thing,’ I mutter.

‘Okay, fine. Yes, he paid, but you know how she is. She wouldn’t give me $2 for my lunch when I was in high school!’ She takes off her hat and slips down her sunglasses which were hiding her eyes, ‘parents are so underrated.’

We laugh.

‘How can you say that? Seriously, my mom paid for this trip, plus she gave me half of my money for College. If it wasn’t for her, I would not be in this car right now.’

Millie speaks, ‘take off your hat, Astrid. It is 30 degrees. Here,’ Gaby passes me a pair of sunglasses and Issie pulls off my hat.

I laugh and slip them on.

‘Now it’s a holiday. Lis is complaining about her cheap mom, Astrid has her Chanel sunglasses that she let me borrow in fifth grade,’ we laugh. ‘I’m sweating like a pig in the back and Millie is checking out those hot boys over there. Feels like summer already.’

Lis laughs, we all do because in that moment, we knew nothing of the future. We didn’t know what was going to happen and it was better that way, before if we did, we’d of turned round right then.
And now I look back, I wish we did turn back and we went home instead of L.A, where something bigger there waited for us all.One

‘Are you ready, Astrid?’ asks Lis.

She stands in the doorway, a rucksack on her back and her favourite burgundy woolly hat on her raven black hair. I smile; Lis has always been the prettiest out of us with her chocolate brown eyes, slender body and high cheek bones. She was perfect looking, not too skinny nor to large, just right. I slip my last top into my bag and sling it onto my back. I put on my boots and grab my brown hat; I push it onto my head.

‘Yes!’

She smiles, ‘good, because you're driving.’

I laugh, ‘I'm the only one who can drive.’

‘I'm getting my license soon, I just don't have the money for it.’

‘I'm surprised your mom gave you the money for this trip.’

‘She didn't, I had to basically beg my dad to buy it for me,’ she scoffs, eye brows raised.

I laugh and we walk out of my room.
‘We need to pick up the other girls; they're at Issie's house.’

‘If we miss our plane, I'm blaming you!’ I tease.
‘It's your fault we're late, you were supposed to be here at three!’
I look at my watch.
'You were ten minutes later,’ the bags go into the boot and we slip into the red car.

‘I actually can’t believe your mom brought you a 1957 Ford Thunderbird Convertible just for this trip.’

I wrap my hands around the steering wheel, ‘me either,’ I sigh delightfully.

Lis chuckles, ‘I so wish your mom was mine.’

I smile and start driving to Issie's house.
‘My mom was giving me the stranger danger discussion and my dad gave me these…’ she opens her bag and pulls out a large box of condoms. ‘He said that he knew what I’m like.’
‘What, a s**t?’ She laughs along with me, lightly slapping me on the arm as I pull over.

I honk the horn and a few minutes later, Issie, Gaby and Millie walked over to us. Their bags also get thrown into the boot before they slip into my car and we head off.

‘So girls, we have an two hour’s till out plane goes off, an hour to get there and just another hour for spare’ Lis says.

Issie giggles at her, ‘calm down, Lis. We’ll be there on time.’

She smiles, ‘sorry, I’ve just wanted this for ages.’

‘Don’t worry. It will go alright. Not perfect, but when has anything been perfect?’ Gabby says.

Lis laughs.

‘Well a part from Lis herself,’ I butt in.

We all chuckle at the statement.

‘Yeah, a part from you,’ Millie nudges Lis, she smiles.

‘Speaking of you Lis, I’m surprised you want to go camping,’ I glance at her, and then back to the road, ‘no offence or anything, but you don’t seem like a camping sort of girl.’

‘I’m not,’ she says bluntly. ‘But, you’re never too young to try something new and wild!’

I laugh, we all do.

‘I like the new car, by the way Astrid.’

I glance to Gaby.

‘Thanks.’

‘Her mom brought it for her, just for this trip!’ Lis butts in.

‘Hey, not just for the trip. I can use this car again and again!’ I protest.

Lis smiles, ‘but your mom made sure you got it ready for this trip.’

‘Seriously Lis, it’s after graduation, my mom brought it for me.’

‘I wish my mom did that,’ she pressed herself against her chair.

‘Anyway, let’s stop talking about school! This trip is to forget about College for a month or so!’

‘Yeah, talking of that Millie, why are we only aloud to bring one bag? If we’re going to be in L.A for a month or more, don’t we need a suitcase?’ Lis says, turning her body to them.

‘No, we can buy more things there. You have money, right?’

‘Yeah, course. My dad paid for the trip and my mom gave me the money.’

‘More like, your dad paid for the whole thing,’ I mutter.

‘Okay, fine. Yes, he paid, but you know how she is. She wouldn’t give me $2 for my lunch when I was in high school!’ She takes off her hat and slips down her sunglasses which were hiding her eyes, ‘parents are so underrated.’

We laugh.

‘How can you say that? Seriously, my mom paid for this trip, plus she gave me half of my money for College. If it wasn’t for her, I would not be in this car right now.’

Millie speaks, ‘take off your hat, Astrid. It is 30 degrees. Here,’ Gaby passes me a pair of sunglasses and Issie pulls off my hat.

I laugh and slip them on.

‘Now it’s a holiday. Lis is complaining about her cheap mom, Astrid has her Chanel sunglasses that she let me borrow in fifth grade,’ we laugh. ‘I’m sweating like a pig in the back and Millie is checking out those hot boys over there. Feels like summer already.’

Lis laughs, we all do because in that moment, we knew nothing of the future. We didn’t know what was going to happen and it was better that way, before if we did, we’d of turned round right then.

And now I look back, I wish we did turn back and we went home instead of L.A, where something bigger there waited for us all. 

Reviews

[Gomeisa]

Well this was interesting.I like the use of imagery you used and the amount of detail you put in it.

However, it still needs a little work. For example, the story doesn't really seem to flow naturally. I kinda seems a bit mechanically, and the tenses are off.

Other then that, it's not bad. I'm looking forward to the next chapter. Nice write and well done.

[Gomeisa]

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