Dear Mommy

Don't you remember?

Where this all began?

Daddy always left us

And refused to be a man?

Don't you remember?

Those nights you cried in bed?

You'd tell me to lock all the doors

And I'd sleep with you instead?

Don't you remember?

Those times I'd yell "Stop!"

As Daddy laid his hands on us

And we'd have to call the cops?

Don't you remember?

That day we said goodbye?

We packed our bags and walked away

You, my brother and I?

Don't you remember?

All that we went through?

You have a new 'daddy' now

But I still need you too...

Don't you remember?

That you are still MY mother?
I know he has two daughters 

But you'd leave me for another?

I guess you don't remember!

And there's nothing I can do.

I tried to keep our family together

All that was missing was you.

Author's Note

This poem ties together with my other poem Dear Daddy.. They both are constructed the exact same way... Please read and review them both if you wish. Thank you.

Reviews

[Davidgeo]

Clever. Very clever.

A little dark, but honest and not ultimately hopeless.

Broken family styled writing is usually cliched and obvious. You avoided that for the most part... and that ain't easy.

(i love when there's layers; this piece has layers)

[L.u.c.a.s.]

YOU are MIGHTY Jungle Kat! You pull at my heart with such a release of pain and anguish. Your pen would win in a sword fight any day! Huzzah!! My heart goes out to all those suffering such heartache, you are in my prayers.

[Katerina Felinova]

:) Thank you!

[Wolfwind]

Oh Kat! I'm not sure which one was more emotionally pulling for me. No...I think this one was, cause I just couldn't imagine a mom being like this. Dad's yes... mothers now. I would think that it makes life for a pretty funky evolution eh? Big Hugs!
One thing I know from reading this, is that you are a strong cookie. For it takes strength to pen such a piece. Thanks for sharing another window of you. I think every little piece helps the soul and spirit in someway. =)

Poetically... it was wonderful!
The only thing I'd suggest is to make the blanket statement... "You shouldn't start a line with AND" ;p

Your Friend,
Aaron

[Katerina Felinova]

Thank you Aaron. :)

[Relic's Bare Trees]

This is such a sad and tragic story. You wrote it so well with a nice continuous flow throughout.

[Katerina Felinova]

Thank you for reading.

[Flo_writer]

Your flow made me wish I had more to read. The poem does indeed make one feel both angry and sympathy. I say well done.

[Katerina Felinova]

Thanks so much

[soliloquy]

My goodness. The seriousness and the intensity is striking. This almost made me want to cry....and get a little angry too. I am so fortunate after all!

The good news I suppose is that you have made it. You seem like you have mostly gotten past much of this and have turned out well.
Believe that my friend.

[Katerina Felinova]

Thank you!