Saloon Dance

A diddly doo, I'm searching for you in this unwinding maze.
A diddly dee, you found me, captured by your gaze.
A little over here, a little over there, my heart has reached for you.
I'm a little left of what is right, I bid thee, how do you do?

Yes, left, two left feet actually is what I mean.
I reach to grab your sleeve as it unravels at the seam.
You turn to stare and ask "How dare?" when you grab your fabric.
I tell you that it wasn't me and really I'm quite ecstatic.

She keeps on dancing on this creaky old wooden floor,
Clogging and diddling around like there wasn't anything more.
She doesn't care about the unraveling of her dress and her naked skin exposed,
Then she grabbed my hand and wanted to dance with me I suppose.

I gave in to her request, but dance with her is what I came to do,
She was a wild one, running and jumping, even stomping on my shoe.
Her smile lifted me up and soon I was dancing above the crowded saloon,
there she was dancing there as illuminating as the moon.

When our dance was done, she dragged me by the collar into the back,
"That was the most fun I've ever had, you picking up my slack."
I smiled and nodded, as she simply kissed me on the nose.
"Go home now you silly boy, before there's nothing left of your toes."

Reviews

[quinfinn]

oh, this is so much fun! i haven't had a better time reading something in quite some time! terrific write!!

[Shawna]

Thank you so much quin! I'm so glad you enjoyed it. :)

[Anna Darksparkle]

it reads like a song. nice done. a little story and i like also the end. thanks.. it made me smile.

[Shawna]

And thank you for your read and review. :)

[Eagle Cruagh]

A cute , funny and tender writing
that brought a smile in each line.
It whirled and spun and played to the
music and it shows a girl and boy to
be the best.
I would love to see more like this because
it is refreshing, sweet and fun.
Thank you
----- Eagle Cruagh

[Shawna]

Thank you so much!

[Frieda P]

This is a totally refreshing read, made me smile a diddly do. Nice work. :D

[Shawna]

Thank you! :)

[kimmy]

I giggled as I read this. You have done a great job on this piece :) The words flow so well together and you have a little humor in it. very good job :)

[Shawna]

Thanks so much!

[Linda Adkins Chandanais]

This is so much fun makes me smile. I like it

[Shawna]

Thank you! I had a lot of fun writing it.