Farther

a song dedicated to someone i thought had left my life for eternity...

Just sitting on my bed with an invisible guitar
Wishing my windows could open up to reveal the stars
Wanting to be where you are--
You've gotten so far.

But see
I'm stuck here in this hell hole
Whilst books plague my mind with aspirations--Not goals
Stuck on a mental parole--Total loss of control

Chorus:
I fix my hair because I'm a love-crazed ho
You fix yours to impress your internet radio
I'm a fucked up punk b***h with a few hockey sticks
I learn slower than the flame that consumes the candle wick
You could probably have anyone.
But your tenacity still thinks I'm the one?
What is wrong with you?

I'll be turning fourteen in twice as many days
The false age you once gave me to sugar coat your manipulative ways
To recall my lovesick phase, it truly does amaze
Me
How could I be so crazy?

I'm dancing in oblivious circles as you keep moving on
You stop every now and then to recall what you lost or is gone
Stepping back to remember what from fate has been drawn
Perhaps that is why your success is taking so long?

(Chorus)

Author's Note

Me: Wow, you've progressed farther in life than I have.
Ex: Haha yeah. I'm still missing one thing, though.
Me: And what might that be?
Ex: You.
Me: ...
Keep in mind folks, we haven't been a "thing" in three years.
So yeah, a bit of a shock much?

Reviews

[Skye Fields]

God, no one's reviewed this yet? Crazy people. Anyway, this is awesome. Love the raw, straight-from-a-punk-b***h's-heart attitude you've assumed here, especially in the chorus :) There's an interesting psychological undertone--sort of like "I can't believe you want me" meets "Well duh! Who WOULDN'T want me?" The line about the invisible guitar is superb, the whole verse, actually. I'd need to hear it performed, but maybe you need something after the final chorus? Some repetition of "What is wrong with you?"? Or maybe an elegant twist, like, "What is wrong with ME?"

Anyway, you're crazy talented and I'll buy your first album when it comes out!

[~VertoAtrum~]

I love your writings. Very raw and powerful. This one I like a lot, very well-written and fresh

[Alexander Z. Anthony]

I like it. Kind of sad, and the main character is left in a situation of wtf do I do now? lol It's an interesting problem and the piece itself captures the essence of that very well! Kudos. (And good luck.)
-Azza

[Raivyn]

I rather enjoyed this piece of work. Fabulous writing! Keep up the awesome work!